Early Spring

winter cowers in shrinking shadows… pale and sweating

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2015 11:03:00 PM

I"m so glad you changed line three. Wow, this is REALLY GOOD (now I gotta check and see if I ever put you on MY fave list, after seeing what Armand wrote you. Maybe I already have, but I better double check)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/1/2015 7:07:00 PM

Holy Moly David, I thought I would double check thinking no way...so sorry I had forgotten to add you to my fav poets list. Shame on me!

David Mohn
Date: 4/1/2015 7:18:00 PM

Thanks so much my friend...you made my night!

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/1/2015 7:04:00 PM

Wow, I just read a brilliant Tanka and now an Haiku (or should I say non traditional haiku). Love this very creative image.

Kp Nunez

Date: 3/31/2015 8:32:00 AM

Good one! Kim :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/30/2015 12:36:00 AM

I sure do like your nontraditional haiku. though the last line is cliche, it just really fits the poem!

David Mohn
Date: 3/30/2015 10:23:00 AM

Good point Andrea...I changed the last line

Casarah Nance

Date: 3/28/2015 6:48:00 PM

beautiful image- :)

Jan Allison

Date: 3/28/2015 6:34:00 PM

wonderful imagery this is beautiful David:-) hugs Jan xx 7 xx