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Cold Is the Gush

With downpour hued in starlit gray, And fallen eyes are interlocked In drizzles where the torrent bites Till candles wane on a fabric soiled Her boudoir cluttered by the wind, Sighing a pitter-patter scream And on a chair, her drooped spine curves, Receding off so constantly Limbs tip tap rhythm on the floor; Alone, betrothed to lonely sheets How cold the gush in Summer's flight. Rain, Rain, Rain Contest of Francine Roberts by nette onclaud 5/25/2013

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/6/2013 6:16:00 PM

boy, this one has a great tone, Nette. I love it.

Len Gasun

Date: 5/30/2013 10:01:00 AM

Hi, my dear friend Nette! Hope you're doing fine! Well, hope we'll meet each other soon. About your poem, sad but soo beautiful one. So happy to read and comment on it once again and most especially seeing it on the winners' list. Not too many winners there but you did it so well! Big congratulations with big hugs! My hearty congrats also for your other awesome wins recently. I'm sorry if I seldom peek at soup 'cuz I'm super busy at school esp. this week. Again, thanks a lot! love lots, Leonora

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 5/30/2013 9:43:00 AM

Big congrats on your outstanding win. AO

Francine Roberts

Date: 5/30/2013 9:11:00 AM

congrats on your 5th place win nette, lovely

Poet Tacito

Date: 5/27/2013 9:26:00 AM

Another stunning piece. Let it rain...

S.Jagathsimhan Nair

Date: 5/27/2013 8:56:00 AM

Lot of images float through the gush of this write! Interesting!!

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/25/2013 11:28:00 PM

Wow, so elegantly phrased this one! A lot of colorful and delicate images. I could be wrong with my interpretation, but I envision someone (male or female lover) leaving the bed out of no where... but the other knows they might not return.

Len Gasun

Date: 5/25/2013 10:15:00 PM

A loneliness with so much beauty. Another very impressive write this is my dear friend Nette. If this is for the contest, a winner for sure! Thank you so much for sharing & your precious visits leaving me another wonderful comments. Well, hope to see you soon my dear friend. Take care and Have a blessed Sunday there! love lots, Leonora

Elai Cee

Date: 5/25/2013 7:28:00 PM

Hi Nette! thanks for visiting my page. really i appreciate your comment. Your work is so wonderful, filled of great imagination.--God bless you---ELAI

Kash Poet

Date: 5/25/2013 7:25:00 PM

Amazing poetry from you Nette!Love this very much.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/25/2013 4:54:00 PM

Great work descriptive of the rain and its effect upon the human emotion..Enjoyed reading your work..It is unique and creative..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and taking time to comment..Sara

Russell Sivey

Date: 5/25/2013 4:31:00 PM

Wow, the extreme power behind your glorious words here is outstanding, a tremendous staring look, through eyes of loneliness! You have written a breathtaking poem...one that inspired a poem directly after I read this one, a different feel than yours but still inspired from it! What a delightfully ingenious poem you have written here my friend! Such a grand piece, Awesome Work!!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/25/2013 4:24:00 PM

You are the master when it comes to describing nature. Well done.