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Haiku 42 - 1,2,3,4

1 a noiseless moment he writes in his diary incessant snow 2 every day he hoped every day she avoided… waning moon 3 his need for love he opened his careless mouth oak tree, splintered 4 words that she heard anger and bewilderment forest inferno

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/28/2013 12:01:00 AM

Well you haven't mentioned sunlight yet... that would top it off nicely :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/28/2013 9:10:00 AM

Sorry... No sun in this one.

Donna Jones

Date: 4/27/2013 4:31:00 PM

These are wonderful Jack....I hope it is a happy ending..guess I'll see...

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/28/2013 9:10:00 AM

I'm sorry... It didn't end happily... Jack

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/27/2013 2:36:00 PM

These are some of the best haiku I've read by you. I love that each one has a nature metaphor that so accurately describes the emotions happening in the first two lines. I, too, thought the second one was a bit more intense than the others, but each was special in their own way. Can't wait for the last installment :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/27/2013 3:17:00 PM

Tomorrow is it, but I'll bet you can guess the ending... Jack

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/27/2013 9:15:00 AM

Good morning Jack, the second one is my favorite. xox~Linda

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/27/2013 12:58:00 PM

Thanks, Linda. Actually, they are four parts of a five-part relationship tale told in Haiku. The final segment is tomorrow. I think I'll attach a note about my intentions... Jack