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The stillest slice of night cuts deep Alone with only mirrored thoughts Reflecting all that softly weep The stillest slice of night cuts deep A splintered plank, now blindly walked The stillest slice of night cuts deep Alone with only mirrored thoughts -09 Aug 2014-

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John Lawless

Date: 10/10/2016 5:58:00 PM

..."A splintered plank, now blindly walked". Love that line. Nice job with the "Tricky Triolet" form

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/9/2016 3:49:00 PM

Very dark and a well-written Triolet, David. Congratulations on your fine win. Sandra

Janis Thompson

Date: 10/8/2016 9:16:00 PM

Love the triolet form. Nicely penned. Congrats.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 8/16/2014 11:14:00 AM

Short but so effective with what you did here-- I really like how this has such a haunting and foreboding feel to it... congrats on your win, David!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/16/2014 1:36:00 AM

Congrats on ur winning wonderful write David!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/15/2014 11:09:00 PM

wow, GREAT DARK imagery!!! A triolet well crafted. Congrats for your win.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/15/2014 8:51:00 PM

David, congratulations....Linda

Faye Gibson

Date: 8/15/2014 1:49:00 PM

Congratulations on your winning placement, David.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 8/15/2014 6:41:00 AM

it's rare that I place a repetitive form poem such as a triolet, but I thought this was a very atmospheric little piece, and somehow the repetition reinforced the unsettling tone of the poem - well done, and congrats on your win in my contest! :)