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First Date- Poet's Dozen

First date - Poet's dozen orange of twilight echoed in sea of desires hope sang eternal .... Soared tender heartbeats as we came close, Golden moments of first date in memories froze, Rising charm set passion ablaze nurturing sweet dreams of oneness, After every meet rose that throbbing crush, Wished our togetherness could ever-last, A tight embrace and rosy red blush Soon ended up in a fierce outcast, Left burning embers into my serene past. Written Jan 3rd, 2016 For "Poet's dozen#2- first date" poetry contest by Silent one Awarded 4th place win

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Date: 2/17/2016 2:23:00 PM
Hi Dr. Upma, that first date, it was either the greatest of joyful nights or a complete disaster, i am, of course, in the complete disaster category. I like the words, the flow, the visions of the piece. In the waters of the first date so many are drowned, still, so many float off into a beautiful sunrise. I really enjoyed the write. A seven from me....Vlad.
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Date: 1/16/2016 7:24:00 PM
Dr Upma, Congratulations on your "Poet's Dozen 2: First date" WIN!!! Love ~ LINDA ~
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Date: 1/10/2016 10:04:00 AM
Beautiful composition. Congrats Upma to win. Anisha D
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Date: 1/9/2016 11:29:00 PM
Dr. Upma A. Sharma, great write, :) bad ending,:( congratulations on your win.
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Date: 1/9/2016 6:39:00 PM
Very well done, Upma. Congrats.
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Date: 1/9/2016 6:37:00 PM
Sorry your first date wasn't your best. Not all first dates are memorable. Congratulations on your win Love, Joyce
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Date: 1/9/2016 4:15:00 PM
Congrats on your placement :) *smiles*
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Date: 1/9/2016 3:43:00 PM
Dr Upma, Congrats on your win. SKAT
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Date: 1/5/2016 9:02:00 AM
wonderful, vivid, enjoyed experiencing it with you. Keep them coming! Light & Love Happy New Year my friend
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Date: 1/5/2016 7:32:00 AM
Good job - I really enjoyed reading your entry and wish you all the best in the contest. Plus, Happy New Year to you - may your world be blessed with ever unfolding joy ... CayCay
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Date: 1/5/2016 3:05:00 AM
I am very impressed with your wonderful entry Dr. Sharma. I hope it rates high. Cheers, Connie
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Date: 1/3/2016 7:12:00 PM
nice doc
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Date: 1/3/2016 4:07:00 PM
Strong write, my dear Dr Upma....Very well worded. I was living the joy until those last two lines...Sad ending. Good luck in the contest with this write, my dear. Hope all is well with you. Hugs
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