Final Break-Up

Colossal retreat Feelings that I’ve harbored true Retracting my love Russell Sivey

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Don Johnson

Date: 9/9/2011 6:45:00 PM

into shells we slip n slide, place where pain we can abide, sometimes....on ya cobber...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/4/2011 10:16:00 PM

I enjoyed this one, Russell.

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 9/4/2011 9:09:00 PM

Been there, that gives us the fuel to write. So much feeling in this to identify with Russ thanks for your visit and sweet comment on Tempatation.

Jack Horne

Date: 9/4/2011 4:05:00 PM

I think we've all been there, my friend - well expressed

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/4/2011 3:38:00 PM

well so true Russell in these mesmerizing lines of Haiku.. wounded hearts react exactly so..emotional one luv..

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/4/2011 2:51:00 PM

It is so difficult to retract that love, Russell, especially when you felt it would last forever. Indeed, it is a "colossal retreat" and some of us never completely lose the feelings we once had for aa loved one. Beautiful haiku, dear. If this is for Michael's contest, I wish you success. Love and blessings, Carolyn

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/4/2011 2:02:00 PM

Great emotive power..Enjoyed..Thanks for the thoughtful review of my work..Sara

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/4/2011 12:07:00 PM

a heartbreaker with powerful wordplay, russel... i can picture it in my mind..:) huggs,nette