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Failure

Failure

Vows were exchanged

Many promises made

Two hearts crushed as feelings vanished

Breakdown




Entry for Catie's "traditional cinquain" contest

Copyright © Carolyn Devonshire | Year Posted 2011

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Gwendolen Song Date: 4/20/2011 5:31:00 AM This is an epidemic in our country, isn't it , Carolyn? Missed reading your work recently. Homework galore!!! I wrote a Snickerdoodle Epulaeryu just for you! Read it while they are fresh out of the oven! Hugs. Hope u are doing well. Gwendolen Login to Reply

Desiree M Date: 4/20/2011 3:15:00 AM Very well written cinquain Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 4/19/2011 5:25:00 AM Congratulations Carolyn on your well deserved win in Catie's contest "Traditional Cinquain". Love, Carol Login to Reply

Red Fiery Date: 4/19/2011 5:02:00 AM simply beautiful ! you have expressed so nicely .............. Login to Reply

Lynette Chachere Date: 4/18/2011 3:52:00 PM the love vanished..its even sadder when they don't accept it..but nothing is perfect. i hope you're well Carolyn.(: ~Always&Forever Lynette Login to Reply

James Foulk Date: 4/17/2011 8:10:00 PM a great write good luck in the contest. Login to Reply

Cory Long Date: 4/17/2011 10:00:00 AM nice job!. cory Login to Reply

Wilma Neels Date: 4/17/2011 9:56:00 AM Hey there Carolyn, congratulations on your win in Catie's contest ;) love Wilma Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 4/17/2011 5:39:00 AM Congratulations on the fifth place win in the contest, Carolyn Login to Reply

Francine Roberts Date: 4/16/2011 8:52:00 PM congrats on your win with this excellent cinquain Carolyn Login to Reply

Black Eyed Susan Date: 4/16/2011 3:02:00 PM Congrats on your win! A very nice piece! Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 4/16/2011 2:31:00 PM yup do I hear you, BIGHUGS! congrad's Light & Love [short sweet and a knife in the heart!] Login to Reply

Charles Henderson Date: 4/16/2011 2:28:00 PM Nice visual of a breakup. You did very well as usual. You are always a pleasure to read. Charles Login to Reply

Jack Horne Date: 4/16/2011 2:03:00 PM Many congrats, my friend : ) Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 4/16/2011 1:13:00 PM I knew this one will be a sure winner.Congrats Carolyn on your win in the contest---kash Login to Reply

Jancarl Campi Date: 4/15/2011 1:48:00 PM THis poem is so sad and yet so true in some lives. I am so lucky the second time around with someone who really and truly loves me. Thanks for all of your kind comments. Take care and God bless you, Jancarl PS I entered the contest on a whim. I wish you luck with your entry. Login to Reply

Wiseton Prins Date: 4/15/2011 12:06:00 PM Such few words remind us a lot about the oldest and saddest pain > that of love gone limp. I suppose it can be traced to human nature as exhibited by kids, we will do anything to get something like that which our friends have, but as soon as we get it, we start taking it for-granted, until we entirely abandon it. > Love is a such a beautiful thing, but it requires wisdom to keep it alive and growing . >>Wish you an awesome weekend my dear friend, Carol. it means so much to have friends like you. Login to Reply

Gautami Phookan Date: 4/15/2011 10:26:00 AM Sad expressions, wish love never failed...nicely done Carolyn, liked the fourth line.Good luck in the contest.Love , Gautami Login to Reply

Doris Culverhouse Date: 4/15/2011 4:11:00 AM sad love doesn't last Login to Reply

Jslambert Mister Roboto Date: 4/14/2011 9:23:00 PM Evaporates as Odoriferous Absurdities in on a windy spring eve! I think this will be the title of my next poem. Excellent cinquain! "Winning is for Winners like Carolyn D. Her words, honey rivers wide, the finest poet-tree!" Ya DiGG? Login to Reply

Phyllis Babcock Date: 4/14/2011 2:06:00 PM Seems to be a lot of break down of marriages. Failure to communicate is a big problem these days. Good luck in Catie's contest. Love Phyl Login to Reply

Diane Locksley Date: 4/14/2011 12:52:00 PM Too many marriages break apart. Wedded bliss is fleeting apparently. Good luck in the contest Carolyn. Diane Login to Reply

Gert W. Knop Date: 4/14/2011 8:38:00 AM Great write Carolyn! But sometimes we might wish that feelings would vanish-they often won't! Best of luck with your entry! Love, Gert Login to Reply

Wilma Neels Date: 4/14/2011 7:03:00 AM Carolyn you said it so well. It is real sad but reality as well, good luck for Catie's contest, love Wilma Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/13/2011 10:46:00 PM Great job and I love the synonyms you used for first and last lines; gosh, you should see me here, my eyes keep closing but I just can't finish yet!! Login to Reply

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