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The Waiting Game

From a derelict house, near the interstate pass, with her cuff of chenille, she rubs a small circle to clear away grime from the cold window glass Better to see now, beyond wooden rails, that have worn disrepair for thirty odd years and have fenced in, long hours of loneliness There's an old pepper tree, that tosses it's head in an alien wind, in a sea of dead grass, where a garden had been There's a face, weathered thin, from neglect and despair she turns for a moment, to glance, here and there, a room she has known, filled with colors long dimmed, where the silence shouts loud, not a question to ask.... but...wishing for something..., a chore, or a task if only the phone might ring..... Near the rail of the fence are two Rhode Island Reds grazing around in the tall weedy grass There's a cock on a post, in the shade of the tree keeping watch on his kin, keeping her company, keeping tabs of a life that has come to an end She will gaze in a lapse, dust motes fall to the floor, in the still of the gloom she will turn once again in the grim of the room... There is still a dial tone, ....maybe the phone will ring.... For a mere month or more, a feral cat came her door then had wandered the floors, neither friend or a foe But he soon disappeared, on the eve of the storm She will call just the same.......just in case he can hear "Here, kitty kitty"....."Here, kitty kitty", but she calls him in vain While the wind plays the same dirty game... Tumble weeds roll and bend, her eyes search through the wind ...as she waits for a friend a friend never there....always due to arrive so she stands by the side, of the black telephone In the old parlor room, in the gloom of a long afternoon Maybe the phone will ring.... ________________________________________________________

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 10/23/2013 8:10:00 PM
so gloomy... enjoyed your poem Carrie,awesome. LOVE -- SKAT
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Date: 10/22/2013 10:12:00 PM
nice win Carrie...LINDA
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Date: 10/22/2013 2:52:00 PM
Such a compelling write saturated in loneliness. Reminders of the phone weaved into the many degrees of a such lonely life. Superb
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Date: 10/21/2013 12:22:00 PM
Heartbreaking story of loneliness, Carrie...congrats on your well-deserved first place win! Love and blessings, Rhonda...
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Date: 10/21/2013 8:05:00 AM
Congrats on first place win, Carrie,
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Date: 10/19/2013 4:52:00 PM
you always paint the scenes so well and take us there through your words...another beauty from you...congrats on your win :)
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Date: 10/19/2013 2:13:00 PM
Carrie congrats on fine win Shadow x smile
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Date: 10/19/2013 9:31:00 AM
Dear Carrie - Oh the sadness, the loneliness. The continued hope in the cat, the phone. Checking for the dial tone. Somehow 'the cuff her chenille' struck me with a vivid picture. Bravo love, Kathy
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Date: 10/19/2013 5:12:00 AM
and I am honoured to share the top spot with YOU! you are a superb poet...and this is a superb write, a vivid and poignant glimpse into this woman's lonely life; I like the subtle use of rhyme scattered throughout - congrats :)
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Date: 10/18/2013 10:46:00 PM
Wonderfully well done Carrie. I enjoyed every word and felt the loneliness. Congratulations on a well deserved win. Love, Joyce.
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Date: 10/18/2013 6:58:00 PM
lovely lovely lovely Carrie well done ...Seren
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Date: 10/18/2013 6:01:00 PM
Carrie....wonderful poem..could be about many people in any place...so relatable..... awesome job....congratulations.... I'm so honored to be here with you as well as shocked....
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Date: 10/18/2013 4:01:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. fav line [where the silence shouts loud ] Light & Love
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Date: 10/18/2013 3:43:00 PM
Your repeating of the line 'maybe the phone will ring' only adds more punch to this beauty Carrie...You have captured the mood perfectly here my friend...Congrats - Tim
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Date: 10/18/2013 2:52:00 PM
Congrats, Carrie...Makes one want to weep...yes, i could picture her aching loneliness...you captured it SO SO well. Makes me want to visit. I used to visit a lady in an old age home...She used to be a socialite. She took pride in showing me a picture of her and Paul Newman! Can you imagine!!! But in the end....the stories were getting shorter, as her mind was taken up by issues of her health...SO SO sad....Your piece is a masterpiece...i can see why Frank honored it...Hugs
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Date: 10/17/2013 10:24:00 PM
Nice faces of loneliness you have pictured so well, Carrie
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Date: 10/17/2013 2:53:00 PM
.... so sad .... give me the number .... I call .... very well done Carrie! - Believe it or not but this is the winning poem!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 10/18/2013 2:04:00 PM
- HOORAY!! - NUMBER ONE!! - YOU WON!! - HOORAY!! - CONGRATULATIONS!!!!!!!!!!

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