Dying For a Drink - Emotive Write
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MY POEM IS FICTIONAL BUT PLEASE READ JOHN HAMILTON'S TRUE POEM 'FOUR, GONE, CONCLUSION' - IT IS A FABULOUS NARRATIVE AND WORTHY OF MORE THAN JUST TWO COMMENTS. THANKS JAN XX
http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/four,_gone,_conclusion_713613
I guess you never meant to cause such pain,
but my world stopped turning on that dark night.
You lost control of your car in the rain -
the mangled wreckage was a dreadful sight,
and my two teenage sons were killed outright.
When the policemen arrived at my door
I collapsed in tears on the kitchen floor.
They suspected that you’d all been drinking
my heart was broken like never before …
I wondered what your parents were thinking.
For you alone were the one to survive
but you’ve been left in a terrible state.
If you’d stayed sober they’d still be alive,
getting behind the wheel you sealed their fate
Any regrets…. well you’re just too darn late.
My two young sons remain frozen in time
they’ll never grow old, cut off in their prime.
Car drivers please listen to my warning
drinking and driving is a dreadful crime ….
I’m left to grieve, for two sons I’m mourning
Checked with how many syllables
Fictional write for Dizain II Contest sponsored by Laura Loo
08~30~16
Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2016
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