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DESPAIR Dark night outside Only lanterns shed light The cold creeps up my spine How long before daylight will warm my soul my heart my core so hard Today she kicked me out I hurt I'm lost alone what do I do? I hold my dog sole source of warmth We'll find a home We will We will I'm sure... The world Is vast Somewhere Will be A home that lasts That loves Welcomes I'm sure... *** 1st place in contest: Duplex Sponsor: Jan Allison December 7, 2016 Checked with How many syllables.

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Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 12/12/2016 3:19:00 PM

Aaaah! The pain of feeling unwanted and unloved; but there's hope that love will come... congratulations on this excellent write and win, Darren! Pandita

Darren White
Date: 12/12/2016 11:16:00 PM

There is hope, one should never lose hope :) Thank you Pandita.

Just James

Date: 12/11/2016 11:14:00 AM

Well done ,great write!

Darren White
Date: 12/11/2016 11:18:00 AM

Just James, thank you :)

Mark Martin

Date: 12/11/2016 10:02:00 AM

Impressive! Cannot add to what others have said below! Congrats! :-)

Darren White
Date: 12/11/2016 10:06:00 AM

Thank you :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/11/2016 4:51:00 AM

Hi Darren, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write.It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Darren White
Date: 12/11/2016 4:53:00 AM

Thank you, Alexis :)

Sushma A. Singh

Date: 12/11/2016 12:37:00 AM

Many Congrats!

Darren White
Date: 12/11/2016 12:38:00 AM

Thank you Sushma :)

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/10/2016 7:58:00 PM

Congrats, Darren. Well done.

Darren White
Date: 12/10/2016 11:42:00 PM

Agnes, thank you!

Janis Thompson

Date: 12/10/2016 7:39:00 PM

Darren, I love the flow and theme of this poem. Congratulations. Leaves you with an emotional sadness.

Darren White
Date: 12/10/2016 11:41:00 PM

Janis, yes it does, and the worst part of it is that it happens. But I am happy with my placement :)

Jan Allison

Date: 12/10/2016 6:37:00 PM

aww I had a huge lump in my throat reading this poem Darren and I love the pic - many many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White
Date: 12/10/2016 11:40:00 PM

Oww, thank you Jan!! For my placement and everything :) HUGS Darren xx

Tamal Kundu

Date: 12/9/2016 10:00:00 AM

A sad, yet lovely read, my friend. Good luck in the contest!

Darren White
Date: 12/9/2016 10:09:00 AM

Tamal, thank you my friend. We'll see what happens :)

Deborah Burch

Date: 12/9/2016 1:09:00 AM

This broke my heart (*tear). I believe when we stir an emotional response from people with our gift, we have successfully accomplished what we set out to do... big Hugggs Darren. Oh I answered your visits !! Lol. Thank you. Deb

Darren White
Date: 12/9/2016 1:15:00 AM

Thank you for the comment on my poem. And thanks for your replies! Much appreciated, I learned a thing or two on dragons and syllables :D

Joanna Daniel

Date: 12/8/2016 11:51:00 PM

Oh my, I can feel the sadness here, Darren!! A winner to me:)

Darren White
Date: 12/9/2016 12:48:00 AM

Thank Jo, I love this little poem, and what comes of it? We'll see :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/8/2016 6:18:00 PM

very nicely done, Darren. Jan will flip for this!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/10/2016 6:36:00 PM

My heart flipped:-):-) hugs jan xx

Darren White
Date: 12/8/2016 11:28:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, I hope she will, but we'll see :)

Tim Smith

Date: 12/7/2016 12:52:00 PM

At least the love between man and pet remains strong...if only it could work that way between man and man.

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 12:56:00 PM

I wholeheartedly agree!

Eve Roper

Date: 12/7/2016 10:35:00 AM

Mmmm :( love the picture of so much compassion.. The poem is so heartbreaking...this goes on in so many homes :"( good luck in the contest it is already a winner to me.. Hugs Eve

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 10:56:00 AM

It does Eve, it really does. And thank you.

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/7/2016 9:11:00 AM

Darren, I think that in the temple of our unconscious, we know that everybody should be let in. A lot of that message is easily lost. Excellent poem full of basic truth about humanity. Indeed, how long until sunrise warms our souls? And in the end, I think we're kidding ourselves about a lot of stuff.

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 9:15:00 AM

We do. In fact, until very recently I didn't have a real home... There should be a shred of humanity in everyone, but unfortunately so many people lack even the basics.

Chris Green

Date: 12/7/2016 8:40:00 AM

Oh my Darren, this one caused an ache in my heart as I read it. For two reasons, because it is so well written with deep emotions and feeling and because this sadly does happen in the world. Good luck in the contest.

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 8:51:00 AM

It does exist, there are so many homeless young people, and a large number of them is LGBT youth... Thank you, Chris.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/7/2016 7:56:00 AM

This is beautiful, Darren! A dog is indeed man's best friend, keeping him warm in his loneliness and despair.

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 8:03:00 AM

Thank you, Kim, warmth and friendship yes :)

Paloma P

Date: 12/7/2016 4:55:00 AM

Such an apt depiction of despair, it's screaming out tween every line. Good luck with the contest Darren.

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 5:06:00 AM

Thank you Paloma. We'll see what happens in the contest, but I am happy with the poem as it is now :)

Claudia Polydoro

Date: 12/7/2016 4:52:00 AM

Wow!!! So very well said. I felt their feelings inside my chest while reading it. good luck on the contest, it's a great one <3

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 5:05:00 AM

Thanks Claudia, we'll see what happens <3

White Wolf

Date: 12/7/2016 2:42:00 AM

A great write, Darren! A befitting picture too I might add! Good luck mate!

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 2:56:00 AM

Thank you, Rick. Yes, that picture is so good with the poem, I agree.

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/7/2016 2:10:00 AM

Hi Darren, I felt a profound sadness and despair in each line. You caputured the feeling of someone searching to belong very well. I'm sure you will be on the winning list. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis"

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 2:12:00 AM

Alexis, THANK you! So much :)

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

Date: 12/7/2016 1:28:00 AM

Amazing how many sad moments are brought about by a specific subject of this nature. well written Darren They say that if you lock your spouse and dog in your car boot for an hour and then open it which one will still be happy to see you afterwards - LOL All the best in the contest! Mark

Darren White
Date: 12/7/2016 1:49:00 AM

I bet.... No I won't bet :D Thanks Mark Paul.