Double Red Sun Dodoitsu- Not For Contest
Red Sun
Option 1
He exudes pulsating heat
Red Sun comes into glory
He pales when compared to you
YOUR flare makes me melt
Option 2
With veiled eyes I look at him
I lie back in surrender
Fiery hands under skin
Love making at best
Eileen Manassian Ghali
I was just wondering if you would be nice enough to say which of these two you prefer. You can also check the one I wrote for the contest. These are my first at this form and well.....It's always good to try! :)
Copyright © Eileen Manassian | Year Posted 2013
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