Debbie's Rhyme Schema

"Iffin I woulda, iffin ONLY I coulda, WELL some think I shoulda, that I misunderstooda cause my brains made of wooda!" said Pinocchio. "A toy's life's sublime without thought of rhyme we dances ta chimes , we've plenty of time an alway in our prime !" Pinocchio said. "But, ta be a boy , the real McCoy" he said real coy, I'd really enjoy the Hoi polloi," said Pinocchio. Gepetto sat with his wine as string he did twine and pondered his line for he was kind, then spoke his mind and he said ... "My little wooda boy, now's notta the season, we're freezin'listen to Papa's reason," he said "God says it's treason and it's His laws we be pleasin' so getta to your bed!" Wood whittlin' rose spittle and words noncommittal, he sighed, just a little and said with voice brittle, "My son ... Maybe tomorrow you'll sprout and I'll route you a new pair of shoes to wear out and about you'll be handsome no doubt." The toy slept and Geppetto whittled. Of the matter he prattered for he wished not to shatter the boys dream to tatters, he was mad as a hatter, it seems? The hall clock did chime midnight, a cricket didclimb the workbench to chatter a soft mime sublime. Gepetto did not notice at least for some time! Jimmy Cricket was his name; he told old Geppetto a wee green sage from a Golden book's page and the meadow. [They were the rage!] They helped to make boy toys for life on the stage and this is how Pinocchio's life was engaged!
woulda coulda shoulda misunderstooda wooda sublime rhyme chimes prime time enjoy coy boy McCoy Hoi polloi twine kind line wine mind reason season treason freezin' pleasin' brittle little spittle noncommittal whittlin' out about route sprout doubt. hatter shatter prater matter tatter chime mime sublime climb time page sage stage engage rage
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Date: 7/24/2014 2:56:00 AM
Very witty / the Hoi polloi ? Was the wooden head dummy going to enjoy being called "Hoi polloi"... O'boy.
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Date: 7/14/2014 1:21:00 AM
Hi Debbie, Congratulations, on your awesome win. Love Linda
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Date: 7/11/2014 6:45:00 PM
I'm impressed Debbie, I tried several time to do this and couldn't get my wooden head around it. Great job and well deserved win.
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Date: 7/11/2014 1:11:00 PM
Debbie, this is great. I always loved that little wooden head and you make him shine again. Congratulations on top place.
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Date: 7/11/2014 2:58:00 PM
Thanks Faye
Date: 7/11/2014 12:06:00 PM
Very impressive, Debbie!! Congrats on top win! Hugs.. Arlene
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Date: 7/10/2014 8:38:00 PM
Congratulations, Debbie, creative and a clear-cut winner. love your rhymes.
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Date: 7/10/2014 5:45:00 PM
A lovely and attractive write which deserved its top placing. Love the originality. Congrats Debbie! // paul
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Date: 7/10/2014 7:10:00 AM
I am not surprised to see this one in the top spot.
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Date: 7/10/2014 7:10:00 AM
Congats on a great win Debbie
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Date: 7/10/2014 3:45:00 AM
Great one Debbie!! I love first stanza I like the beat!! Congratulations Debbie..:D big bug one..:) Pinocchio one of my fave fairy tale ..:)
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Date: 7/10/2014 3:04:00 AM
am mesmerized by your poem ,never in a million years could I have written this.......well done and congrats ...Seren
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Date: 7/10/2014 12:29:00 AM
U really awe me this one Debbie ! Congrats on first place win ! I Kept pondering for days But could not get a thing on this scheme ,, gem of a piece // Upma//
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Date: 7/9/2014 11:16:00 PM
Congratulations Debbie on your first place. Your Rhyme Schema on Pinocchio is the original. Well done... Verlena
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Date: 7/8/2014 9:20:00 AM
I really like the direction you took with this piece. You could enter this one in a couple of current contests and I am sure it would do well.
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Date: 7/6/2014 11:12:00 PM
Not easy....actually quite a complicated story your fine art is based on...
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Date: 7/5/2014 3:35:00 PM
love this fun write, Debs. Thanks - enjoyed the contest x
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Date: 7/5/2014 1:43:00 AM
Debbie, this contest was not so easy to do but you cracked it. I am still struggling. Best, Mohan
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Date: 7/4/2014 7:47:00 PM
Well done, it is great to see more of these being done. and yours was terrific!
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