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Dark Love

love the night, the lack of glare,    the subtle sounds
the hoot of owl and the  warm street light,  oh love,

love the blue black all around  my heart pounds
my blood rushes     firecrackers fly above

moon captured,  Japanese lanterns on a string

jewel gingerbread houses    lullaby winds

the stroke of love as it laps    the church bell's ring

love the down comforters   nighttime's soft grin 

love the punched hole made with a pin   on black
to view the eclipse while the sun takes nap

cherish  the silhouette dark  paper unpacked 
images of lovers ones all unwrapped 


*Without the dark, we wouldn't see the stars.*
10/20/13

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Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/20/2013 6:27:00 AM Reminds me of a poem I've written but never posted or shared, about luring the moon into my room and warning the morning to stay out of sight. Maybe I should find that one and post it. Loved this work, Debbie :) Login to Reply

Jake Ponce Date: 10/30/2013 1:15:00 PM You perfectly captured the beauty of night in this piece. Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 10/24/2013 11:36:00 AM Splendid..Clever and so beautiful.Ow yeah lady you transmitted feeling.. 'Japanese lanternes on a string'..That s a romantic imagery.Tnks for stopling by..Big hugs and Winter is coming.I remember your last Winter was rough.Stay warm dear. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/23/2013 9:43:00 PM Some really gorgeous lines in this one, Debs. I loved the one: "nighttime's soft grin" and "love as it laps" too!!! Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 10/23/2013 6:52:00 PM There's 3 poems here, the original format is quatrains with the end rhyme [a,b,a,b/c,d,c,d/e,f,e,f] since the judge favors rhyme - I would call this a NONCE FORM - a nonce form is generally created by a poet for a specific poem but which may, over time, and with repeated usage by subsequent poets, become a "received form." Enjoy! Light & Love Login to Reply

Kelly Deschler Date: 10/23/2013 5:57:00 PM Yes, I love the nighttime, too! I love the sound of the owls. I love the glow of the moon and the stars. The night seems to have more of a serene and cozy feeling, that day does not. Wonderful poetry, Debbie! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!...Thank you very much for the kind comments! Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 10/22/2013 7:39:00 PM So clever are you.........a poem within a poem !!! There are stars throughout your poem of poems! Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 10/22/2013 4:31:00 PM wonderful write....thanks for stopping by....best wishes Login to Reply

Karen Anglesey Date: 10/21/2013 12:25:00 PM Simply lovely with stunning imagery. A very creative rhyme :) Login to Reply

Eileen Manassian Date: 10/20/2013 10:28:00 PM Fabulous, Debbie...What awesome images this conjured up in my mind....You are a master! HUGS HUGS HUGS! Login to Reply

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 10/20/2013 9:36:00 PM Wonderful!! I love these images of night, Debbie! I've always been a night owl, myself...I wanted to thank you for reading and commenting on my ghazal. I'm going to try to write another as you suggested just to challenge myself. Love and blessings, Rhonda Login to Reply

Sandra Adams Date: 10/20/2013 7:38:00 PM love this one...I am afraid of the dark at time...I love seeing the moon and hearing owls and the crickets singing in night's air...yet the lack of light, lets the imagination run wild sometimes...good poem Debbie...love your images In this one :) hugs Login to Reply