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Dark Cradle--For Contest

Dark Cradle
white birch silhouette stark against cold midnight black cradling lunar face
6/26/2015 submitted to – Traditional Haiku – Poetry Contest sponsor – Shadow Hamilton

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 7/1/2015 8:33:00 PM
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A very nice concept tweak it a bit more so it says what you really saw if only in your minds eye- You need to have an action to join lines 1 & two - it would be the moon on a white tree which would stand out against the night but not the silhouette which is a shadow - that would be dark on dark. Light & Love
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David Mohn
Date: 7/1/2015 6:29:00 PM
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loaded with incredibly descriptive images...wonderful John
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Dr. Upma A. Sharma
Date: 7/1/2015 4:21:00 AM
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Congrats on ur awesome winning haiku John!
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Date: 7/1/2015 12:53:00 AM
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John, congratulations on your Traditional Haiku win. Love LINDA
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/1/2015 12:28:00 AM
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Lovely skeletal imagery, John. One of the best Haikus I've seen in yonks. Congrats and regards, Viv
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Skat A
Date: 7/1/2015 12:10:00 AM
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Wonderful win... SK
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Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 7:59:00 PM
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A beautiful haiku, John! Great imagery! Congrats on your placement in the contest! Love, Kim
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James Tate
Date: 6/30/2015 6:06:00 PM
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I like it, John
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John Lawless
Date: 6/30/2015 6:50:00 PM
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Thanks for checking in James
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Eve Roper
Date: 6/30/2015 4:49:00 PM
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John, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Paul Callus
Date: 6/30/2015 4:16:00 PM
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This is one of my favs in this contest, John! Absolutely beautiful. Congrats on a very deserved win. // paul
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John Lawless
Date: 6/30/2015 6:50:00 PM
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Thank you Paul for stopping by to read and comment.
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Carrie Richards
Date: 6/30/2015 2:53:00 PM
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This is so lovely, John !!! I can almost see it !! :)
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John Lawless
Date: 6/30/2015 6:47:00 PM
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Thanks Carrie, appreciate your support.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 6/30/2015 2:04:00 PM
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this is amazing, John. Congrats for being the winner list!
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John Lawless
Date: 6/30/2015 6:47:00 PM
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Thanks Andrea, I have an old bent white birch in my neighbors yard to thank for the inspiration.
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Shadow Hamilton
Date: 6/30/2015 1:06:00 PM
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you nailed the form John congrats on 4th place hugs
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John Lawless
Date: 6/30/2015 6:46:00 PM
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Thank you Shadow, Haiku and I are engaged in a seemingly endless tong war. Appreciate you taking the time to sponsor the contest.

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