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Crystal

with her dear children she builds castles in white sand - tiny particles glistening in her hands her smile is translucent and like the crystalline ocean beneath the midday sun she sparkles having cooked for us she brings out delicious food arranged beautifully on clear glass platters and from a matching vase she serves us drinks pouring out liquid from crystal my son’s wife our newest grandson’s mother and my second daughter she is Crystal Written by andrea dietrich 3/9/14 for the Metaphor: Crystal contest of nette onclaud

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Date: 6/12/2014 2:48:00 PM
What a lovely poem for Crystal. I bet she was thrilled. I love the crystal effect of the lay out of this poem. awesome. love phyl
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Date: 3/26/2014 10:28:00 PM
Love how you brought it all in at the end. The ocean simile is awesome. And there is something strangely mesmerizing about the lines "she builds castles in white sand - tiny particles glistening in her hands"
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Date: 3/21/2014 3:12:00 PM
Liked this one then realised it was a contest winner. Well done Andrea. lovely piece and the presentation reminded me of crystals, dont know if this was intentional. regards and thanks for popping by Andy
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Date: 3/21/2014 7:00:00 AM
This is a very lovely and sparkling write my very dear friend Andrea! I love it and so enjoyed reading it this evening. TYSM for sharing. My hearty congratulations as well on your win! Biggest hugs! love lots, Leonora
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Date: 3/21/2014 4:49:00 AM
Was going thru my fav's poems list (Yours are listed quite often) and ran across this baby and realized I didn't congratulate you on your win, so I will do so now---Congratulations!!!
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Date: 3/19/2014 4:37:00 PM
Andrea :) Congratulations, with your winning poem in "Nette O's CRYSTAL: metaphoric, contest." LUV~LINDA
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Date: 3/18/2014 11:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your winning poem in the contest of Crystal, andrea
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Date: 3/18/2014 9:56:00 PM
Andrea,... love the win...SKAt
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Date: 3/18/2014 2:52:00 PM
an embodiment of what a true crystal should be, andie...i like your daughter!.. warm congrats on your fine win in my contest.. huggs
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Date: 3/18/2014 1:19:00 PM
I remember this :) - Andrea, congratulations on your great win in contest : CRYSTAL - A beautiful poem ! (Sponsored by: Nette Onclaud) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/18/2014 1:18:00 PM
Congrats on your win Andrea
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Date: 3/17/2014 4:39:00 PM
Lovely write and tribute Andrea......I bet she was thrilled to read this, what an amazing mother in law you are, congrats on your new addition. Hugs
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Date: 3/16/2014 12:39:00 PM
Beautiful poem Andrea...best wishes
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Date: 3/14/2014 11:11:00 PM
Wow, so precious and beautiful... Linda
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Date: 3/14/2014 7:27:00 PM
She is Crystal and she is beautiful. Wish everyone could see her photo. How lovely you wrote about your lovely daughter in law Andrea. I am sure she will love this poem and I will bet Nette does too.
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Date: 3/12/2014 9:44:00 PM
Oh...beautiful as always, Andrea. You made her name sparkle and shine with this write...
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Date: 3/12/2014 5:24:00 PM
From what you wrote Crystal seems like a fine person. Very well written! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 3/12/2014 1:03:00 AM
Nicely written poetic ode to your daughter-in-law.
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Date: 3/11/2014 9:38:00 PM
Soup Mail for Dandy Andie...
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Date: 3/11/2014 6:14:00 PM
What a beautiful tribute to your daughter! Your love for her is crystal clear. A very nice write, Andrea. Good luck in the contest!...By the way, thank you for my placement in your Swap Quatrains contest. I do appreciate your encouraging comments, also! :)
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Date: 3/11/2014 2:58:00 PM
lovely tribute to crystal. Thanks - fun contest and congrats on your wins, of course, my friend x
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Date: 3/11/2014 10:08:00 AM
Newest grandson-- congratulations.s.s my dear. Blessed are those who get so much of affection. God bless all.
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Date: 3/11/2014 8:09:00 AM
I can clearly see this sparkling at the top of the winners list.
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Date: 3/11/2014 7:00:00 AM
There is an old saying that a son is a son until he takes a wife. How blessed you are that you gained an obviously lovely daughter in the process. (Soup mail)
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Date: 3/11/2014 5:04:00 AM
cyristalline, crystal, Crystal...Perfect! What a great idea for the contest! Go directly to favs, do not pass go...
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