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Criminals: Part 4-- Fiction

The ware house was hot and humid rob located the crate on the upper level right next to his own; he asked our boss to lease for an employee discount. Before we left work earlier he charged the batterie for the old fork lift, we pulled down the crate filled with our own little dreams inside We knew axactly how to open it because we sealed it tight, like no one would ever reveal the contents but the owner. A rush of air poured out of the crate like a wave from the cool ocean, bubbled wrapped and given "extra" special attention for the long wait The owners are in Florida enjoying the sun We are in the ware house enjoying their goods I heard they weren't to kind to some Ones who had not trusted their maids until their return Filled with old greats of art, including a few rear vases molded by the beautiful hands of Tiffany :) To Be Continued

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 8/4/2010 5:44:00 AM
Dude, you are off the chain.
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Date: 8/3/2010 9:48:00 PM
Love the imagery and creativity. Look forward to reading the rest of the story. Have a great day! Scarlett
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Date: 8/3/2010 9:06:00 PM
Well done on the continued story, this one was nice. Looking forward to reading your continued story..Just drop a line when part 5 is in. Have a nice one,..p.d.
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Date: 7/22/2010 6:25:00 PM
and the story continues. You have a very creative and vivid imagination. Thanks for sharing this with us. Very entertaining. Steve
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Date: 7/21/2010 6:45:00 AM
Very creative! thank you for your comment, love Simone
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Date: 7/21/2010 3:32:00 AM
Mysterious saga that you have going..Sara
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Date: 7/20/2010 10:56:00 PM
you write great stories. i love the crimnal saga you have going, great write!
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Date: 7/20/2010 5:42:00 PM
Have you ever thought about writing a short story? And don't you just hate the character limitations on the submissions? I'm enjoying the story, I hope it's not too long though.:)
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Date: 7/20/2010 4:39:00 PM
Super Diamond Rich.. reminds me of a setting from Criminal Minds.. my fav TV show.. u have the gift and the flow my friend.. waiting anxiously for the continuation.. with luv..
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Date: 7/20/2010 4:27:00 PM
Hi Diamond Your name brings a smile to my face as i have a mate called dai and his nickname is diamond geezer . Reminds me of pulp fiction the suitcase where you never know what the contents are. Good stuff Cheers
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