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Crestfallen (Quatern) And now - there is but emptiness slow breathing of unscented air that on my soul did so impress the aura of her presence near. The wine’s been poured, the bottle passed, and now - there is but emptiness cold loneliness of shadow cast sweet fading touch of parting’s kiss. Lingering hints of love’s duress shared secrets that we could not bear and now - there is but emptiness and tears shed for an empty chair. For love’s first flowers always bloom as waves full powered at their crest then wilt, and break, and leave the room and now - there is but emptiness. 4/20/2014

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Date: 5/13/2014 9:48:00 PM
Nice win John.... Linda
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Date: 5/13/2014 4:22:00 PM
I love your take on this John. so heart wrenching...I could feel the loneliness.....Tim
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Date: 5/12/2014 1:39:00 PM
Very well done. The four repeated lines did not seem out of place or contrived.
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John Lawless
Date: 5/12/2014 6:41:00 PM
Thank you Mark, it ain't easy weaving the same line into four stanza.
Date: 5/12/2014 11:20:00 AM
Great pen John ! U Came out wid such a masterpiece ! Congrats on top win !
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John Lawless
Date: 5/12/2014 6:39:00 PM
As always, thank you for your input and comments
Date: 5/12/2014 10:59:00 AM
wow mezmorizing you have painted this poem with wonderful detail and superb quality. I loved every line. Congrats on the winning spot. Well done
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John Lawless
Date: 5/12/2014 6:38:00 PM
Casarah, nice to hear from you and thanks for the kind words.
Date: 5/12/2014 10:19:00 AM
magnificently quilled. john.. sweet cheers on your award!.. huggs
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John Lawless
Date: 5/12/2014 6:37:00 PM
Thank you Nette
Date: 5/11/2014 9:13:00 PM
An interesting form well done. congratulations on your win. Love, joyce
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John Lawless
Date: 5/12/2014 6:35:00 PM
Thank you Joyce for reading and commenting
Date: 5/11/2014 4:28:00 PM
wow, John, so cool to find out who did this number one poem I chose in my contest. I love the atmosphere of sadness you portrayed so well thru this form of poetry. so beautifully expressed! Congratulations
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John Lawless
Date: 5/12/2014 6:34:00 PM
Andrea, thank you again for throwing down the gauntlet. I tend to avoid poetic forms but have been having some fun in the poetry soup family.
Date: 4/21/2014 7:56:00 AM
Good write. I especially like the last stanza. And thanks for stopping by my write. Looks like we were both up all night writing Quaterns..lol. BG
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John Lawless
Date: 4/21/2014 8:38:00 AM
Yeah! Andrea entices us into these contests and then test the tenacity of the muse. Always good to make the braincells line up in a different sequence. Thanks for reading and commenting. Always appreciated.

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