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City Noir

The sidewalks sweat on August nights Typewriter pounds as city heats A neon sheen imbues the blight Alone I smoke with soul contrite An ashtray's blush, belies discrete The sidewalks sweat on August nights An earring left at passion’s height Rewinds the yearn of lust replete A neon sheen imbues the blight Impaled I bleed this city's spite In brooding mirth I ooze conceit The sidewalks sweat on August nights An airline ticket beckons flight With whispered lies of comforts sweet A neon sheen imbues the blight It’s here I glean the rage to write Extracting marrow from the street The sidewalks sweat on August nights A neon sheen imbues the blight Chopped III Contest Including: A typewriter An ashtray full of cigarette butts (some with lipstick on them) A single gold earring An airline ticket (new or used) 09 Dec 2014

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Date: 2/7/2015 8:04:00 PM
Very good use of form, the city can be very inspiring, perspective is everything! Light & Love
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Date: 12/31/2014 8:20:00 AM
Dear David: Thank you for your support. All the best for the New Year. Leon
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Date: 12/29/2014 9:43:00 AM
I love it David Congratulations.
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Date: 12/26/2014 11:00:00 PM
DAVID, congratulations in Craigs C., chopped contest.... LUV LINDA
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Date: 12/23/2014 4:34:00 PM
Awesome villanelle. I had considered a film noir theme also, but couldn't get past the private eye cliches, so switched it. Loved the rewind line in particular with the play on yearn/yarn.
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Date: 12/22/2014 9:03:00 PM
Perfect for the challenge David! Congrats on big win!
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Date: 12/22/2014 9:11:00 AM
Each element of this contest, invites the word "noir"... and you blended the image in my mind to perfection. Love this! A blend of each required challenge. Great job! Happy Holidays to you, David!
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Date: 12/21/2014 8:43:00 PM
Congratulations David on your well deserved win with this stunning Villanelle.
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Date: 12/21/2014 3:42:00 PM
love the imagery and the repeated lines - congrats:-) Hugs jan xx
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David Mohn
Date: 12/21/2014 4:08:00 PM
Thanks so much Jan...have a magical Christmas
Date: 12/21/2014 12:13:00 PM
Congrats David.
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Date: 12/14/2014 12:53:00 AM
Cool city beat, David! Yes! I'm a Twin Cities boy! Lake Calhoun is my favorite walk in August! jimbo
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