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Climbing frames where we grazed our knees Knees kissed better by watchful mum. Mum always there while we had fun Fun days at play – how I miss them! Contest Four Lines Only. Nette Onclaud Checked with how many syllables 7th June 2015 Jan Allison Visual 5

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Gary Dye

Date: 7/3/2015 11:14:00 AM

Awesome as always

Joe Maverick

Date: 6/14/2015 3:18:00 PM

Congrats on your placement here Jan..'

Jan Allison
Date: 6/14/2015 4:53:00 PM

thanks Joe:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/12/2015 11:07:00 PM

Jan, I just stopped by to say congrats on your win:) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 6/13/2015 4:45:00 AM

Thanks Alexis:-) Hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 6/12/2015 7:45:00 PM

jan, Congratulations on your 4 line win. Hugs SKAT

Jan Allison
Date: 6/13/2015 4:44:00 AM

Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kim Merryman

Date: 6/12/2015 6:12:00 PM

Brings back good feelings from the past. Great write! Congrats on your win, Jan! Love, KIm

Jan Allison
Date: 6/12/2015 6:13:00 PM

thanks so much Kim:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 6/12/2015 1:10:00 PM

Wonderful write Jan...Congrats on your win

Jan Allison
Date: 6/12/2015 2:46:00 PM

Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Edward Ebbs

Date: 6/12/2015 7:28:00 AM

Coming back to say congrats :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/12/2015 2:45:00 PM

Thanks so much Ed:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexander Seal

Date: 6/12/2015 7:00:00 AM

Thats great - it is nice to be able to watch my little son and recall good memories

Jan Allison
Date: 6/12/2015 2:44:00 PM

Thanks Alexander:-) Hugs jan xx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 6/10/2015 10:44:00 PM

I miss them too, Jan. I have good memories of the playground and would love to relive them with my own kids someday... You've done so well with this challenging contest. Good luck to you! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/11/2015 1:45:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Kelly I do hope your dreams come true:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 6/10/2015 5:27:00 PM

Great childhood memories, Jan. I like your take on this image, although I chose the same visual using a different interpretation! Best wishes for the contest! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2015 5:35:00 PM

It is lovely to see the different interpretations of the images:-) Hugs Jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 6/10/2015 3:38:00 PM

Sadly my mother didn't stick around long enough, not that I recall much previous to six years old. Too much trauma at a young age has blanked my memory. Love this short piece wishing it was me, hugs, James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2015 3:41:00 PM

Oh James that is sad that your childhood memories aren't good thankfully you have some lovely memories of other happy times to cherish:-) hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin

Date: 6/9/2015 3:57:00 PM

a lot said in a few lines! well done, jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2015 3:58:00 PM

Thanks Thomas:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 6/8/2015 5:19:00 PM

We did not have any of these things where to play when I was young!! But mind you, I have tried them out not that long ago...a dare from V. Very good entry...wish you luck:) hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 5:42:00 PM

Thanks Paul I am sure you and Valentina have fun in everything you do:-) Hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/8/2015 3:25:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your very descriptive work..It aptly describes the scene as though written by someone who has experienced it..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 5:10:00 PM

Thanks Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Roberts

Date: 6/8/2015 6:20:00 AM

Jan thanks for comments from another ex-Brummy, saw your notes. Poems were one therapeutic way of coming to terms back in 2007, I had Male Hormone Therapy for 28 weeks followed by 4.5 weeks of radiotherapy, now on annusl PSA testing and have received excellent treatment all the time at Southend Hospital and as a member of a Support Group. I had a very supportive family and still have though sadly my dear wife succumbed to an embolism last year. Must finish with a hug, take care Mike x

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 6:30:00 AM

So glad you are doing so well and are using your poetry and humour to get a valuable message out to people that this cancer can be cured. hubby had robotic surgery in 2013 3 monthly PSA tests but life is good and I now have a wonderful hobby which if you read my poems has got me through the worst possible time in my life with my dad being diagnosed with terminal cancer. So sorry to learn of your sad loss - keep writing & I will keep reading - I will add you to my fave poets :-) Hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 6/7/2015 11:56:00 PM

Come on, Jan, let's go swing. Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! Lovely piece of innocence and nostalgia. Good luck in the comp. Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 1:49:00 AM

Thanks Viv I hope Nette likes it - I have seen some great poems for the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Edward Ebbs

Date: 6/7/2015 11:09:00 PM

LOL, Play with them when the kids are in school...no one will know, nicely done Jan :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 1:48:00 AM

I have been on the swings lol :-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/7/2015 10:35:00 PM

this is adorable,Jan. I went in the totally opposite direction for this challenge. Oh, and I wanted to say, that was great assonance in line one with the long A sound. I really like this!!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 1:48:00 AM

Thanks Andrea - I do appreciate your feedback - I just hope Nette likes my take on the image:-) hugs Jan xx

Sneha Rv

Date: 6/7/2015 8:34:00 PM

I loved this!! All tge best in the contest, dear Jan!! :D :D

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 1:47:00 AM

Thanks Sneha I am sure you will pen a brilliant poem - hope you join in my footles contest too:-) Hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 6/7/2015 8:24:00 PM

G'day Jan... those were the days Jan. Nothing else to worry about but the playground - thanks Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 1:46:00 AM

Yes the complexities of life take over when you finally grow up - oh for the innocence of childhood! Hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 6/7/2015 7:12:00 PM

Jan, this is quite wonderful and sweet 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, apply within

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 1:45:00 AM

Most of the entries have been for the gravestone poem so I deliberately went for a different image:-) Hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/7/2015 6:24:00 PM

Great job Jan, You used your four lines well. I started remembering the fun times me and my siblings had at the playground immediately . Good luck in the contest:) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 1:44:00 AM

Thanks Alexis it is a great challenge Nette has set us:-) Hugs jan xx

Mark Trichet

Date: 6/7/2015 5:32:00 PM

Nicely done Jan, conjures memories of playful times with my boys in grounds such as this...GL

Jan Allison
Date: 6/7/2015 5:34:00 PM

Thanks for commenting Mark I do appreciate it - gives me memories of my own childhood and also that of my sons - hes flown the nest now:-) Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 6/7/2015 4:48:00 PM

Oh that looks like such a fun playground, I'm one of them moms that climb and slide with my lil one, and I'm the one that ends up with busted knees! Good poem for the prompt!! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/7/2015 4:59:00 PM

OH you are a fallen angel again woohoo:-) I used to when david was little now I will sneak a go when no one is watching lol:-) Hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 6/7/2015 4:29:00 PM

My youngest daughter would love that park Jan...You got to watch? I have to participate...I am willing though : )

Jan Allison
Date: 6/7/2015 4:32:00 PM

It is written from eyes as a child then as an adult - oh I have been on to the kiddies playground and been on the swings and little rocking toys one problem - I was the only big kid there lol - just hope none of the students from high school saw 'miss' lol :-) Hugs jan xx