Captivated

as deep as the ocean
my thoughts dare to dive
as strong as devotion
my will has designed
as long as i breathe
or could there be an end of time
as in all love stories
everything will be fine
as distant as the farthest star 
i would follow you there
as words they make vivid pictures
they're there to prove i care
as the sun goes down another day
look up to God and then i pray
and as the stars slowly appear
each wish i make to bring you nearer

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 2/15/2012 3:01:00 PM
A very charming well written write!
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Date: 2/14/2012 2:06:00 AM
Thanks, John, for your kind comment re my poem. I enjoyed reading your well written poem, Captivated. Cheers, Maureen
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Date: 1/17/2012 7:18:00 AM
incredibly written, john... such graceful movement and tonality of pharses..:) huggs!
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Date: 1/16/2012 3:19:00 PM
Enjoyed this one..I feel the love in this one..Very passionate work..Sara
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Date: 1/15/2012 8:39:00 AM
I'm feeling that this has to do with a memory John. Sounds like it sustains you in the most amazing way. Hugs, Lizzie :)
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Date: 1/15/2012 7:17:00 PM
No. It is a generalization of the power of love. Yes it comes from memory but they are maternal and have graduated sence then. I'm sorry for what I did to make you block me for these few days. And even sorrier that you had to come back because you know I have the fire. At least for now .
Date: 1/15/2012 7:45:00 AM
Wonderfully and beautifully written. Amen.
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Date: 1/14/2012 5:54:00 AM
A love poem to God. this is very sweet I must say, Enjoyed this a lot :)
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Date: 1/14/2012 3:16:00 AM
wow! truly captivating indeed. there's a raw emotion here that simply make this poem 'burns'
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Date: 1/13/2012 3:47:00 PM
Nice poem John. In your fifth line, all you have to do is put an "e" on the end of "breath". What you have there now is the noun, but you need the verb. Adding the "e" to the end of that noun will make it a verb. Everything else looks fine.
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Date: 1/13/2012 12:30:00 PM
I truly am captivated by this marvelous piece! What I think is so brilliant is the fact that you chose to write in lower-cased letters and capitalize the "G" in God. I appreciate a writer (poet) who's not afraid to "shake" things up a bit! Well done!...Milt
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Date: 1/12/2012 6:08:00 PM
So heartfelt and true, blessings to you, all the very best John and thank you for your visit, love in Christ, brenda : )
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Date: 1/12/2012 5:57:00 PM
John-This is such a strong motivational piece-it's just great! You are being WAY too nice to me today BTW :)
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