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Broken- Ninette

BROKEN Damn that day eye contact love at first sight failing visions lie whispered good-byes body found beneath dam 10/11/2015 submitted to Ninette – Poetry contest sponsor – Silent One

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/15/2015 4:08:00 PM

Glad to see this one won. It was one of my favorites.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/15/2015 6:09:00 AM

Creative one..I hope that body was not a loved one..Thanks for reading and considering my work for your contest..Sara

Skat A

Date: 10/14/2015 10:21:00 PM

John, Congratulations on your "Ninette Win." Love SKAT

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/14/2015 12:50:00 AM

Wonderful take John n a superb win! Big congrats!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/13/2015 9:56:00 PM

oooh, a dark one too!! I really like this. Don't know your placement but I see it got a win. Congrats to you. clever how you used homophones on each side of it instead of antonyms or synonyms.

Michael Tor

Date: 10/13/2015 4:11:00 PM

John you said so much in this Ninette. Cleverly written with a surprising twist in the end. Congratulations on your win! I liked this write very much.