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Written for 3 stanzas only contest by Broken Wings

Tears fall; they cannot mask my pain Grief embedded so deep in my heart. My stillborn babe, in death he’ll remain Our whole world has just fallen apart. For nine months you were a part of me Time passed by, I could feel you grow. Your tiny fingers and toes I longed to see But your death brings us nothing but woe. My breaking heart aches, bitter tears I cry For you, but I know god had another plan. I’ll think of you always when I look to the sky Sleep safe in the arms of Jesus, my little man. Submitted to Any poem written in July Sponsored by Laura Loo (fictional write for contest only) 07~26~16 Form used – rhyme. A rhyming poem has the repetition of the same or similar sounds of two or more words, often at the end of the line

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John Hamilton

Date: 2/4/2017 7:42:00 AM

Wonderful write Jan 35/40, congrats on shared third place win!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/4/2017 11:25:00 AM

Many thanks for the chance to showcase an old poem and for my win John:-) hugs Jan

Tom Arnone

Date: 8/17/2016 8:45:00 PM

Touching. I'm sure a fetus luxuriates in its very own first womb. Congrats! :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2016 4:14:00 PM

Thanks Tom:-) hugs jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 8/17/2016 1:49:00 PM

Jan... :(:(:( so sad, which is probably why I loved it so much. So heart breaking...wonderful flow to go with it...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest! :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2016 4:14:00 PM

Thanks so much LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/2/2016 6:22:00 PM

Hi Jan, I had a feeling this heartfelt write would be on the winner's list. Congratulations on your winning write:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 8/2/2016 6:51:00 PM

Thanks Alexis - I will read the winning poems but not in one go I think they will be very emotional:-( hugs Jan xx

Just James

Date: 8/1/2016 2:45:00 PM

very emotional ..well done!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/1/2016 5:45:00 PM

Thanks James:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts

Date: 7/30/2016 7:26:00 PM

Jan am so glad its fictional, such a sad thing to happen......Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 8/1/2016 5:45:00 PM

Makes me very sad reading it Seren:-( hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/30/2016 7:24:00 PM

ok, a man can cry after all. :(

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2016 7:26:00 PM

It's a tear jerker Arthur thanks for reading:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/28/2016 8:14:00 PM

Constance loves this kind, Jan. A sad one indeed!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2016 3:41:00 AM

She wanted sad I hope I've delivered:-) hugs Jan xx

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/27/2016 12:46:00 PM

Ahh..This brought me tears dear Jan.I did miscarry a child in my first years of marriage..It was 12weeks old..Just beginning to form. I do believe it in my heart it was going to be a boy( A Ben Or A Zack or Francesco)... Nowadays I accepted the loss..believing in afterlife..but its not easy.A fave.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2016 12:51:00 PM

Oh charma i am so sad that happened to you - I know other's who suffered miscarriages, one friend has the child's name tattooed on her :-( hugs jan xx

Ronald Kent

Date: 7/26/2016 8:21:00 PM

Very nice read and well done at that.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2016 3:29:00 AM

Thanks Ronald:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/26/2016 5:50:00 PM

Hi Jan, This is so sad. And I cried because it was so devastating. This sad write should do well in the contest.A Big seven:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2016 5:57:00 PM

Thanks Alexis - its good to change my style from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/26/2016 5:50:00 PM

aww, this poem brings tears to my eyes, very well done wiht a heartbreaking situation like that... hugsxx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2016 5:57:00 PM

Thanks Cas - I don't know if I could go on if anything happened to my son - i can't think of anything worse than losing a child:-( hugs jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 7/26/2016 4:51:00 PM

I see these tears first hand in my job Jan. So glad this is fictional.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2016 4:52:00 PM

Oh Jean it must be absolutely heartbreaking to witness first hand:-( hugs Jan xx

Chris Hagy

Date: 7/26/2016 3:39:00 PM

Sad deep write Jan...I have two sister-in-laws who lost babies before term...but as this beautifully says "...safe in the arms of Jesus..." we know where they are:)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2016 3:41:00 PM

Oh Chris I am sorry you can relate to this through your sister in law's losses - it must be truly heartbreaking to lose a child:-( hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/26/2016 2:35:00 PM

A parent never gets over the loss of a child. It's just not supposed to be that way. Very sad write Jan on a subject I am familiar with.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2016 2:36:00 PM

Oh Daniel I am so sorry you have experienced loss like this - losing a child at any stage of their life is truly heartbreaking:-( hugs jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 7/26/2016 12:10:00 PM

Beautiful poem about a sad subject. Good luck in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2016 12:22:00 PM

Thanks so much Janis:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 7/26/2016 11:45:00 AM

Very heart wrenching Jan. I can feel the mothers pain.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2016 12:00:00 PM

Its a heartbreaking situation to go through 9 months of pregnancy, childbirth and then to have your baby born dead:-( hugs Jan xx

Mike Hauser

Date: 7/26/2016 10:50:00 AM

What a heartbreaking write!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2016 10:52:00 AM

Thanks Mike - I do surprise people with serious writes from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx

Kelli White

Date: 7/26/2016 10:18:00 AM

God bless you

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2016 10:25:00 AM

Thanksfully for me it's a pure fiction write for the contest Kelli, but many years ago a friend suffered a stillbirth and she never ever recovered from it - I was only about 17 at the time and I have never ever forgotten the utter devastation in her life:-( hugs jan xx