Backpack-Lunchpail

neighborhood children board the old yellow bus... sad eyed dog walks home

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Line Gauthier

Date: 4/16/2018 9:12:00 PM

Lovely, Carrie. You manage to get the intention of haiku - that is to get the reader to conjur up the feelings and not tell the reader how he should feel. Beautifully done.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/13/2010 8:57:00 PM

Oh, I really like this. But for me , it's senryu! Luv, Andrea ps. hmm, it must be for summer ending contest. IN that case, it matters not what I just said, heehee

James Fraser

Date: 8/13/2010 2:03:00 PM

I see this from a perspective of Mom awaiting her family home, of just a child to come home. With Iraq, I just see more than others do. Sad but beautifully written Haiku Carrie >> James

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/12/2010 6:24:00 PM

Great work. Summer goes so fast. Thanks for your comments. Love, joyce

James Marshall Goff

Date: 8/12/2010 5:07:00 PM

bare essentials of good haiku! BRAVO! Carrie! jimbo

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/12/2010 3:54:00 PM

Very appropriate Haiku Carrie as lots of kids started school already ... the West Coast begins earlier than out here on the East Coast.. our kids go after Labor Day.. enjoyed with luv..