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Awaiting Dawn

These walkways cutting deep through lush fields under a gloomy sky, Oh, I fear would lead me down a path to this Melancholy Moon, So I'll wait till the rise of a new sun to show me the way! ~Contest: Sijo ~Sponsor: William Kekaula "Glorious Sijo Fields" contest by Andrea Dietrich.

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/15/2021 1:45:00 PM

I have read your winner and see its good qualities. Way to go in the contest. Congrats. Sara

Christuraj Alex

Date: 10/13/2021 11:00:00 PM

Very beautiful piece. Congratulations!

Hilo Poet

Date: 10/13/2021 7:51:00 PM

Time passages, Abdul, well done my friend, Aloha!

Abdul Malik
Date: 10/14/2021 8:55:00 AM

Thanks a lot.

Skat A

Date: 2/15/2015 10:47:00 PM

Abdul, Awesome take, Congrats in Andrea's Sijo contest. -- SKAT

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/9/2015 3:06:00 PM

Ahh!! Great quality poetry!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara

Jan Allison

Date: 2/8/2015 2:23:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Abdul:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/8/2015 8:44:00 AM

I see we chose the same picture, congratulations.

Paul Callus

Date: 2/8/2015 7:30:00 AM

Ah! I see you do not take unnecessary chances, Abdul! Waiting for the right time makes sense:) I like your creative sijo and it sure deserves to be on the winners' list. Congratulations!! #7 // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/8/2015 1:00:00 AM

I enjoyed the message of this one, a new day to show the way. Congrats in my contest. Also loved how you made it a melancholy moon.

Abdul Malik
Date: 2/11/2015 9:09:00 AM

Thanks Andrea. Always enjoy your contests.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/1/2015 12:41:00 PM

great turn on the last line, Abdul... am awesome sijo true to form.. huggs

Abdul Malik
Date: 2/4/2015 8:29:00 AM

Glad you liked it, nette. Appreciate your comments. Thanks.

David Fisher

Date: 1/31/2015 3:36:00 PM

Wonderfully written, Adbul. Looks like a great contest entry!

Abdul Malik
Date: 2/4/2015 8:30:00 AM

Thanks David.

John Lawless

Date: 1/31/2015 11:41:00 AM

Go for it Abdul, at times even the moon needs someone to sit with it....in silence. Nicely done.

Abdul Malik
Date: 2/4/2015 8:32:00 AM

I am still waiting for the sun though. Thanks John.

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 1/30/2015 6:41:00 PM

Im constantly amazed at how each person sees something a bit different in these pictures. I enjoyed your poem and especially the Melancholy Moon..BG

Abdul Malik
Date: 1/30/2015 7:00:00 PM

Like they say "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder!" We all see differently the same thing - and there lies the beauty!

Jan Allison

Date: 1/30/2015 6:34:00 PM

Beautifully penned Abdul good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Abdul Malik
Date: 2/4/2015 8:35:00 AM

Thanks Jan. Like always I appreciate your comments.