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Below is the poem entitled Asphyxia which was written by poet VALERIE THE HEAVY HEARTED POET. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.



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I lay here alone
I close my eyes 
and I listen
there is nothing
not even the sound of my breath
the silence is so impervious and profuse
I am suffocating in your reticence
your muteness is congesting my lungs
my airways are constricting
in a panic my body begins to flail about
clawing and scratching in an attempt for survival
my exertion is desperate and in vain
for there is no bag to escape
nor a rope to loosen
I can not physically save myself
I gasp for a breath
but I fail
inhaling nothing but the emptyness of your quietude
one word could extricate me
acknowledgement being my lifeline
a single tear trickles down my face
its hopeless
because in order to rescue me
you have to kill yourself

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  1. Date: 8/30/2013 12:12:00 PM
    Sad, you've already come to the conclusion the person who can save the subject of your poem doesn't love them enough to do so...very sad, but a very good write!!! MC

  1. Date: 6/9/2013 12:46:00 PM
    "In order to rescue me you would have to kill yourself" Strong words. I'm really feeling this poem. Its like a suicide mission I'm on. Wishing you the best! Awesome job!

  1. Date: 4/26/2013 9:06:00 PM
    Valerie, you took me in to the depth of your sadness. It is sad to know, some one can take your life away, without being there. I love this stimulating write, it has opened my mind with my words, you took me into a world of regrets. I'm not saying you regret but, something does not complete you. Your poem is awesome, and I love it. love~ SKAT

  1. Date: 4/26/2013 10:51:00 AM
    I came back for another read..please tell me about this particular piece in soup mail if you can.

  1. Date: 4/26/2013 8:03:00 AM
    Ooooo..this is super intense!! I love the way you kept me on the edge of my seat with this one.. :)