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Asking Alice

Alice had many friends, seems quite a few others have fallen down the rabbit's hole. Janet appears often at the foot of the mushroom arguing with the Caterpillar. Rubbing her legs tired from dream running, "Dern nightmare's always chasing me!" Alice pokes her. "Miss Janet, why don't you stop running? Have a piece of cake?" Somewhere, Janet hears her sisters voice listing sweet things, warm, cuddly kittens, chocolate bunnies, candy canes...the voice fades in and out.. Screams too come from far off, "Get OUT!, get out..I hate you!" Her mother cries. And lots of other nasty things too naughty for a little girl to repeat. Smoke wreathes around the Caterpillar's head and the circles spiral downward tickling Janet's nose. "Alice?" "Yes Janet?" "Why do they say there's no place like home?" Alice frowns, "You shouldn't ask me dear,come... let's find Dorothy for you!'

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 12/17/2012 8:07:00 PM
I liked this one right away. I think this is my personal favorite. Excellent work and win Debbie.
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Date: 12/14/2012 6:25:00 AM
Congratulations on your win...loved this piece...took me back in years... Haven't been on Soup lately..Thank you for stopping by.. Love, Mehnaz
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Date: 12/13/2012 6:41:00 PM
Congratulations Debbie on your rewrite of Alice in wonderland and your win. Love, joyce
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Date: 12/13/2012 4:29:00 PM
Is this one from your treasure trove from a yr ago? I enjoyed the blending of fairy tale ideas and new characters..congrats, Debbie!
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Date: 12/13/2012 11:56:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Leonora's "Waking Up" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/13/2012 7:01:00 AM
congrats on your win..
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Date: 12/13/2012 12:56:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning spot Debbie love xx
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Date: 12/13/2012 12:26:00 AM
Well written Debbie! I love the approach you've taken with the form - very nice. Congrats on your win!
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Date: 12/12/2012 8:20:00 PM
Congratulations on your win my dear friend, Debbie! Thank you so much for your full support! love and hugs, Leonora
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Date: 11/28/2012 10:50:00 PM
I feel like I in a dream inside a dream inside a dream. Fortunately I know where the door is. Poor Alice, poor Janet, poor Dorothy. Enjoyed your poem.
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Date: 11/17/2012 8:07:00 PM
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Date: 11/16/2012 8:04:00 PM
A fairy tale for adults, great twist on classic tales. I really enjoyed your creativity. Sorry you missed my Poem, I was in the process of editing it. Feel free to pop back over, I always appreciate your kind words.
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Date: 11/16/2012 6:31:00 PM
Hi Debbie Alice frowns and she replies, You should not ask me dear. How withered have we become Debbie when our options have been demeaned to the point lying is the only option at our disposal. Sad I think how life has come to this. Cheers Chris
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