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Across the Way - The Sequel

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Across the Way - The Sequel

Another day and the dishes have piled up yet again
So back I end up in front of the window 
I do not glance up, but concentrate
On the dull, dirtied objects before me
I do not hear the voices from yesterday
I still wallow in the grime of gray
I smile in malcontent
As I lather the dishes with soap
Against my will, I look up 
To see a lone, fat man opening a refrigerator
He is shirtless, bulgy, and he looks pregnant
My first supposition is to laugh
But I only look back down at the dishes
Not wanting to stare at the fat man
Not wanting to think he looks pregnant
For sure not wanting him to be my neighbor
Across the way

Against my will again, I look up
The fat, pregnant man is gone
I see ornaments on the refrigerator
Some pictures, some magnets
Family; not so different from my life
But yet, there is a transparent fancy of mystery
A flashy rage of difference in the silence
Oh, so quiet
The blazing sun sprays its light upon the hour
Not only are my hands wet from the soapy water
The deafening tone of quietude
Revels in me a mixture of loneliness and physical heat
A burning desire for something not seen
A desire for utter disgust of my newly found neighbors
But I find myself not disgusted at all
Until I look up again and see a fully naked man at the window
Across the way

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  1. Date: 7/21/2013 9:26:00 AM
    Quite a funny sequel. It is of interest that there are certain things we see that we can never forget. Post traumatic stress with a laugh.

  1. Date: 7/16/2013 11:09:00 AM
    Hahahaha, this is awesome! Absolutely love it :)

  1. Date: 7/15/2013 6:34:00 PM
    Ha-ha...hahahahahaha... You are funny! I love that word "Quietude" :o)

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 7/15/2013 7:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Based on a true story ladies and gentlemen, minus the darker sentiments. Had to add a bit of darkness to it. :) Oh, Dan.... thanks for reading. I'm glad I could make you laugh. :D
  1. Date: 7/15/2013 10:11:00 AM
    Holy crap! Loved this! I had a sense of how it would end, but you proved me mostly wrong. lol We have to make a short comedy out of this or something...excellent job!

  1. Date: 7/15/2013 6:48:00 AM
    You have a unique way of telling the ordinary which is truly extrordinary. The act of washing the dishes is a simple act that grounds the reader and at once makes the images feel real and substantive. Very well done.