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A Summer Remembered - Sijo String

Stretched far and wide, sun smoothes the beach, and finds a place to land It spreads a sheet, then fastens lace to all our summer skies No day sees a wave so high, without thoughts of you or dreams renewed Sun slept on the water's surface, rippled like heat, melting the glass My head against your chest, could hear your heart, soften, after our swim and I watched white seagulls fly, away to where the sky, blended to grey Pages remain in old albums, but I see them so differently It's clear, now as if photos, reveal sharper views, of what we didn't know Almost seems a better thing to face the unknown unprepared Evening beckons my head to rest, ..old loves are lost with the sunset Summer was ours awhile, for just a day, like the seagull.....flies away Tonight, all I hear are waves, to break the silence of the night ______________________________________________________________

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 1/29/2015 3:54:00 PM
Carrie, love the imagery on this write, very romantic, a 7. Blessings dear friend Eve
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Date: 7/7/2014 7:29:00 PM
So beautiful, congratulations!
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Date: 7/4/2014 1:11:00 PM
This is extremely awesome my dear friend Carrie! Thank u so much for sharing. Many hearty congratulations on your great win! Many hugs and cheers! love lots, Leonora
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Date: 7/4/2014 6:11:00 AM
This one goes to my fav's . First Sijo I've ever read that reads like a story. Beautiful and very touching. I just loved it. Great writing, Carrie. bfn, Lainie
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Date: 7/3/2014 9:50:00 PM
reminded me of that old movie from the late 50's or early 60's. Always it kept coming on tv as a rerun movie.DAng, what was it called. Two people lying on the beach as waves crashed over them. I just know it will come to my addled brain later tonight.
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Date: 7/3/2014 9:49:00 PM
this is SUPERB. Utterly gorgeous, CArrie. It would have been MY top pick, and Debs sure got this one right. Congrats.
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Date: 7/3/2014 5:46:00 AM
A great write on passion, sweet and passionate one, Carrie. congrats on the win
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Date: 7/2/2014 9:27:00 PM
A most elegant fusion of form and passion. Congrats on your win
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Date: 7/2/2014 5:30:00 PM
Perfect! Way to go, a wonderful write and a wonderful win! I enjoyed this very much :)
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Date: 7/2/2014 4:27:00 PM
So soft Carrie..:) Sweet and romantic, I like the sway of emotions in between the lines your 2nd and 3rd stanzas they are my faves:D!!! CONGRATULATIONS!! :)
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Date: 7/2/2014 3:33:00 PM
Hi Carrie, congratulations on well-deserved 2nd place win! The imagery is magnificent! Kindest regards.
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Date: 7/2/2014 2:17:00 PM
EXQUISITE!! Rides the wave from joy to fading sorrow, and the distant sound of a receding tide.
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Date: 7/2/2014 2:01:00 PM
Very wonderful Carrie ! All r mesmerising ,, loved the last one the most ,, big congrats on top win!
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Date: 7/2/2014 1:29:00 PM
Congrats on a great win with such a romantic story of summer love, Carrie, my friend. Hugs.. Arlene
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Date: 7/2/2014 12:46:00 PM
Excellent! Carrie this is worth finding in the book of memories. Congratulations on a merited top placing. // paul
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Date: 7/2/2014 11:58:00 AM
Really exquisite…congrats Carrie!
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Date: 6/19/2014 12:23:00 PM
Splendid!!! Is an Understatement
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Date: 6/11/2014 7:14:00 PM
Carrie, this is outstanding. I like your line 'pages remain in old albums, but I see them differently' and the next one 'photos reveal sharper views, of what we didn't know' Love the growing and maturing perspective. A sure winner for the contest, I bet. Goes as my fav. Mohan
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Date: 6/11/2014 2:50:00 PM
I floated along when reading this and was totally absorbed in the world and mood it created. Just excellent!
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Date: 6/11/2014 9:32:00 AM
Brilliant!!! Carrie. This goes to my fav's. Thank you!!! Lainie
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Date: 6/10/2014 5:27:00 AM
Nice happy memories of the past, carrie
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Date: 6/9/2014 5:33:00 PM
simply stunning!good luck with the contest. Hugs Jan xx
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