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A Summer High

Amidst the endless summer waves Your liquid magic makes me high As through your tunnels I do ride Amidst the endless summer waves They course around me as I glide And into paths of seas unknown Amidst the endless summer waves Your liquid magic makes me high. Written on 5/24/2015

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Highwave Brian

Date: 5/29/2015 7:24:00 PM

So interesting and clever use of words; I like it!

Sneha Rv

Date: 5/25/2015 1:37:00 AM

This is very lovely!! All the best in the contest!! P.S - Isn't the rhyme scheme supposed to be different? Just noticed! :D :D

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/25/2015 8:09:00 AM

Thanks, Sneha, for catching my mistake! I think I made the right correction. :)

Skat A

Date: 5/24/2015 4:41:00 PM

I will enjoy this high.. Forever **SKAT**

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/24/2015 5:41:00 PM

Thanks, Skat! Enjoy:)

Anna Hopper

Date: 5/24/2015 3:32:00 PM

Interesting... "Liquid magic". Could mean so many things. With that aside lol, EXCELLENT write! I love this style of poetry and you definitely made it look good! I am very interested in attempting a triolet!

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/24/2015 3:42:00 PM

It's not a drug high, as some would think, in this instance. My write is based on a visual of a surfer in a wave from Andrea's latest poetry contest :)

Jan Allison

Date: 5/24/2015 3:23:00 PM

a lovely triolet Laura - good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx 7 xx

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2015 3:40:00 PM

I've yet to even look at the contest Laura:-) Hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/24/2015 3:39:00 PM

Thanks, Jan. My first attempt at a triolet AND iambic pentameter! Hope I got it right :)