A Spring To Summer Romance

he was not my type
but by the time it was spring
i wore that man's ring

once he wore me down
i flowered in the garden
of his sweet attentiveness
but began to droop
in the absence of his care. . . . 
July’s drought was hard to bear

that ring he gave me -
cheap like his lackluster love -
broke in mid-august

By Andrea Dietrich

(combination senryu and choka)
For Russell Sivey's 
Relationship Breakups Poetry Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011


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Date: 2/17/2014 4:21:00 PM
Andrea This is a very creative write. The comparison of the flowers death and love intertwines nicely. Well done Thanks for the great comment on my Two Friends And A Puppy poem
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Date: 10/26/2011 6:34:00 PM
Hi.. Andrea.. stopping by to say good night... I just want u to know is that.. u rock....and no I'm no where near depression.. but it has tainted me a bit... Ha ha... Take care... P.d
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Date: 10/14/2011 8:05:00 PM
as u must know by now..Constance has left PS..deleted all her poetry and blogs and will judge her contest soon as it is filled up.. but that is it... she is devastated by all the arrows slung at her and insists she won't return.. Carol Brown considering too.. and Carrie from her last blog ... well right now I have no time Andrea butm I might take a break..not sure.. I like PS..and when it is good it is very good.. hope all is restored with administratiion too..luv.. just wanted u to know..
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Date: 10/13/2011 10:18:00 AM
Congratulations on your 1st Place win Andrea. Sorry to be late to comment. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/12/2011 11:35:00 AM
Woosh! Great write Andrea, and thanks for reading my Silent Times. Good luck in the contest. Ingibo
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Date: 10/9/2011 12:42:00 AM
ANDREA, CONGRATULATIONS ;-) ~ IN Russell Sivey, CONTEST.. GREAT ENTRY,..ALWAYS,..P.D.
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Date: 10/8/2011 11:24:00 PM
Ditch him, he wasn't worth it! Great write, congrats on your win. Lee
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Date: 10/8/2011 9:55:00 PM
Great to see you in the one spot with this beauty Andrea. Agape, Moses
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Date: 10/8/2011 8:31:00 PM
excellent effort...light & love
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Date: 10/8/2011 7:24:00 PM
congrats on another 1st place andrea! I really like this one, well thought out combination of senryu and choka
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Date: 10/8/2011 2:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your stellar win!!!!===Lori
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Date: 10/8/2011 2:01:00 PM
very nice.. I can picture your every word.. congrats on your win. free spirit
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Date: 10/8/2011 1:56:00 PM
Gosh, I missed this one earlier on Andrea, congratulations on your first place win ;-) love your approach to the contest!! Love Wilma
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Date: 10/8/2011 10:53:00 AM
Like the way you did this one Andrea in comparing love with a flower who dies without love and care. Outstanding. love phyl
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Date: 10/7/2011 4:11:00 PM
cool composition of a broken relationship with nice rhyme to enhance the flow Andrea.. good luck in Russell's contest luv..
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Date: 10/6/2011 8:44:00 PM
awesome poem! such great use of symbolism! i love love love this! you will kick butt w/this poem!
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Date: 10/6/2011 7:27:00 PM
Very moving poetry delivered with style and profound thoughts. You are such a wonderful writer! Thank you for sharing your talents!
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Date: 10/6/2011 4:52:00 PM
Bet that there ring turned her finger blue. No loss. You said it at the beginning - "he was not my type." Luck in the contest. Love, daver
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Date: 10/6/2011 4:03:00 PM
Now, do tell us all, dear Andrea...what IS a JULY DROUGHT EXACTLY? ha ha.....I wrote the bat poem for her blog bc she had my favorite haiku on there for the longest time about a fishy that jumped into the toilet. She changed the pic to a bat from a fruit tree in her own back yard. My new haiku is to go with her new blog photo...since u asked...lol. ~~~~Hit the top with this winning write. I can't believe all the amazing entries...it's too personal for me to write about love. Pain....pain....ugh.
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Date: 10/6/2011 3:32:00 PM
yes very nice combination of forms to tell the broken relationship.Enjoyed.Best wishes ANDREA...
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Date: 10/6/2011 3:32:00 PM
yes very nice combination of forms to tell the broken relationship.Enjoyed.Best wishes ANDREA...
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Date: 10/6/2011 3:15:00 PM
A great combo of forms, Andrea, and all too often the enchantment of love fades as years pass. Best wishes in Russell's contest! BTW, Deb has asked some of us to "lengthen" our entries for her contest. Mine was shorter when originally posted. Saw your note on Jack's entry about the Banshee. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/6/2011 3:08:00 PM
oh shucks but this sure can be very true-- I like the defiant tone you put in your last senryu...and I hope this does well, sweetie :) hugs to you-- yup my connection's funky again....
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Date: 10/6/2011 1:58:00 PM
Clever use of these two forms, my friend. I love the description of his ring being lacklustre, like his love - very powerful
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Date: 10/6/2011 12:33:00 PM
Love the poem; memories. You picture it perfectly; so adroitly. All those cheap rings I handed out maybe didn't mean much, but we had fun. In early romance we learn about relationships, then go on and marry the wrong person.
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