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A Man Stood Part II

A Man Stood Part II Story/poem A man was standing by his window on a cold winter day. He was thinking about his past, when a phone call came. It brought him back to reality. He answers and says hello. the other voice says - hello, are you Ben? He says - yes, but who are you? The voice said - before I answer. I have a question. he said - alright. Are you married? He said no. The other voice said - I'm the blast from your past. For a moment, he stood quiet, than he asked - are you my Lucy? The other voice said yes I am. Suddenly the past has come back to hunt him. He reflexes for a moment. Then he asks - where is my daughter? His memorey has not left him yet. He remembers that he has another daughter. many questions he had. He wanted to know many things. He found out that he had grandkids. His daughter was living in another state, but his grandkids were very close to him. He got to meet the oldest granddaughter and her kids that day. He got to meet his daughter two months later. All was going well, until he found out that his daughter was not the perfect child. Their relationship did not go well after that. Of course the mother was to blame. she had not raised her daughter right. The mother is always to blame. all I can say is that we do what we can in life. I got to see him seven months later, after I found him. It had been forty years. A lot can happen in forty years, people change. He looked very different. He said that he had loved me a lot. The thing is that he had a strange way of showing it. The relationship with his daughter is not good. She don't talk much to him. He still lives alone. I got to meet his cat. He never again got married. He now has plenty of time to think. We don't know what the future holds. All I know is that this is not the end. Life brings us many surprises. When the past comes back to the present - what do we do?
01/07/2013 Written by Lucilla M. Carrillo. To be continued

Copyright © Lucilla Carrillo

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  1. Date: 3/23/2013 3:25:00 PM
    You have my eyes glued to your words.. your style is so addictive and your grab the reader by the hand... on to part 3

  1. Date: 1/17/2013 1:46:00 PM
    going onto the next one--phyl

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 2:06:00 PM
    a little further down this lonely path. Why do mothers get the blame??? Does that mean fathers get the credit???

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 1:28:00 PM
    Lucy, you are doing well expressing the past. and the only image you held within all these years... a life without a new life is a sad life.. a cat is not such a good companion... glad you got to meet his cat... always~PD

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 12:59:00 PM
    Now I will move on to see who the past can be!! SID

  1. Date: 1/8/2013 7:31:00 PM
    wow, so he was/is your dad!!! Yes, it can end up not being that happy reunion you had hoped for. My mom divorced my dad when I was five and he was not really in my life, though I kept up with him. I sure know that feeling of alienation. I enjoyed reading this bio.

  1. Date: 1/8/2013 12:03:00 PM
    Looking forward to reading the end ...... Part 2 were both happy and a little sad ..... and he is still lonely ..... - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 11:22:00 PM
    Oh, kinda good that he got to meet you and his daughter, grand-kids. Will stay tuned to your story. Very interesting. Love ya, Toquyen

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 8:40:00 PM
    This is totally awesome, you have brought this man into reality with his daughters and grand-kids! This is a wondrous write for your series! I look very forward to reading part III and maybe more...maybe his Alzheimer's will catch up to him?! You will have me in suspense until then no doubt! Thanks for telling me of the continuation, please let me know when the next one is posted too! What a vision you have with this delightful piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 6:13:00 PM
    What a breeze, I cannot wait for next Luci, let me know when you post it later for the next story, I'm in huge curiousity of this, really a great penned :D - hug, yanny

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 5:37:00 PM
    Interesting write, I need to go find part one to this xxx

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 5:21:00 PM
    A wonderful ending to a suspenseful first part! Bravo... Terry

    O'Leary Avatar Terry O'Leary
    Date: 1/8/2013 1:19:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I'm anxiously awaiting part 3... Terry