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A look at myself

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A look at myself

He strives for improvement, never reaches his goals
A young male struggling strong foes
His whole life considered inadequate
Life is dull, and his heart he should quit

Taken and destroyed for being himself
Despondently trying to control what his heart felt
Rejection is faced at each and every turn
His heart's torn open, his eyes burn

Never giving up he studies his life
Watching others, adjusting his life
With a new goal, he works incredibly hard
Improving his body, improving his heart

With these improvements he tries for love
For he's focused, watches everything he does
With a dollar and a romantic quote
For valentine he sent a small note

Feeling good, proud of his improvements
He's worked hard, how can he miss
His chest is bigger, abs are more cut
Even more smiles, and more acting tough

Well rounded he thought, talented in music
Poetic and smart, that's how he viewed it
Sure just once, he'd have that valentine
The pride and the joy, to call his heart mine

"Thank you for the note, but i don't feel for you that way."
"I know..." he says, and she walks away
He fought a war, and he has lost
Tactics were changed, but he still shouldn't of fought

Now he sits there, writing down his thoughts
A pathetic young male, mourning his loss
Something is missing, something he doesn't have
Why else would every time he tries, he winds up this sad

He looks at himself, a broken mess
Torn and ripped, rejected at best
With one more rhyme, he finished the poem off
Submitted the poem, before he logged off

Copyright © William Hughes

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  1. Date: 2/14/2013 6:54:00 PM
    I spent plenty of Valetine's Day alone and depressed. I can truly relate to your poem. A fantastic read.

    Hughes Avatar William Hughes
    Date: 2/16/2013 8:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yea. Makes valentine day seem like the opposite of a celebration..