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A Giant In the Garden

I sing to the world as evening arrives, my sweet dulcet voice calling. When out of the blue a giant stops by. Under the verdant green bush I hide while around me I watch the leaves falling. So awkwardly they bumble through the giants on legs spindly and long. Walking past dogwood and bending yew, my hiding place in constant view, he stops and looks, he hears my song. Cup in hand he walks toward me. My gentle voice I silence. Looking through each bush and tree, as leaves quiver in gentle breeze, My mind in tranquil quiescence. A hand extends through thicket dense to grab me from the perch I've known. His hesitation I can sense, as voice I hear from distance says, "James, leave the crickets alone." 08/25/15

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 9/18/2015 1:40:00 PM
awesome... SKAT
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Date: 9/18/2015 11:07:00 AM
glad to see you place with this James - my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/16/2015 11:00:00 PM
Wonderful write n win James! Big congrats!
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Date: 9/16/2015 5:25:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your win! hugs Eve
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Date: 9/16/2015 12:50:00 PM
thanks
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Date: 8/30/2015 1:16:00 PM
This is a great write, James. Hope it does well in the contest!
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Date: 8/29/2015 12:05:00 PM
What a wonderful poem, I love the twist at the end perfect for the contest a 7. Thank you so much for visiting my ABC poem. Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/27/2015 4:09:00 AM
love the twist in the end... flow is good and the imagery also!!!~Olive Eloisa =')
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James Inman
Date: 8/27/2015 7:21:00 AM
Thanks Olive. Appreciate the nice comment.
Date: 8/26/2015 9:17:00 PM
Well crafted, James, kept me guessing. Superb. Good luck in the contest, not that you'll need it. Regards, Viv
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James Inman
Date: 8/27/2015 7:19:00 AM
Sorry for for the misspell, Viv, wrote it in a hurry on my phone last night.
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James Inman
Date: 8/26/2015 9:21:00 PM
Thanks Viv, sometimes luck is all I've got.
Date: 8/26/2015 5:57:00 PM
This is a superb write. I didn't expect the ending and was getting a little...uneasy wondering what giant was going to lurk out from behind a bush or tree. Great ending...unexpected. Thanks for your lovely visit to my poem.
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James Inman
Date: 8/26/2015 6:47:00 PM
Thanks Eileen. Love your poetry.
Date: 8/26/2015 4:45:00 PM
Thanks for visiting my poem. I L O V E this wonderful write ~~
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James Inman
Date: 8/26/2015 5:20:00 PM
Thank You BW.
Date: 8/26/2015 4:26:00 PM
Love your poem, James! What a turn-around ending that I didn't see coming! Very clever. All the best for the contest. Sandra
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James Inman
Date: 8/26/2015 4:44:00 PM
Thank you, Sandra, for the nice comment.
Date: 8/26/2015 8:47:00 AM
An interesting poem, James. Well done for its imaginary qualities. Julia, :)
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James Inman
Date: 8/26/2015 10:17:00 AM
Thanks Julia
Date: 8/25/2015 8:00:00 PM
This made me smile! THANKS Light & Love
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James Inman
Date: 8/25/2015 8:53:00 PM
Thank you Debbie, I love it if I can make someone smile.
Date: 8/25/2015 7:46:00 PM
wow, I was thinking you were a bird. It makes so much more sense that the boy would be trying to catch a cricket. This is GREAT thinking out side the box. I would surely rate it high if it were in a contest of mine called Giant animals!!
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James Inman
Date: 8/25/2015 8:51:00 PM
Hey Andrea. Thanks for the positive comment.
Date: 8/25/2015 3:40:00 PM
Love your take on the theme James such wonderful personification - I went for ants as my 'giant' animal - looks like we were both thinking out of the box lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 8/25/2015 3:50:00 PM
lol:-) Hugs Jan xx
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James Inman
Date: 8/25/2015 3:48:00 PM
Jan, I thought about ants! The first line I thought about changed it to crickets. Great minds think alike, too bad in this case you're thinking like me.

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