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A Bad Morning

...Those eyes once bright and deep blue looking back at me dull faded grey. I think to myself, I know you as I stare at the image reflected in the mirror. He is not the man I remember. Beads of water coalesce on my skin and slowly roll down my chest. I hear water running and look to my left, seeing the spray against the curtain. Oh, my shower I think and step into the tub. The water is cold I turn the knob but it doesn't respond. A sudden sense of deja-vu envelops me. I finish my shower quickly and step out to shave. Cold showers and shaves do not mix, this will hurt. I look at my self in the mirror and touch my chin. It is smooth. Funny, I could have sworn I needed a shave. I brush my teeth and glance up again. My reflection gives me pause. Those eyes once bright and deep blue looking back at me dull faded grey. As the water beads on my skin, I hear the distant sound of water running... 11/12/15

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Date: 11/29/2015 10:37:00 PM
Excellent piece, James! Congratulations and a 7 on your wonderful win! By personalizing this piece, you made it that much more powerful - what a deep impact you created! The imagery is unforgettable! Pandita
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James Inman
Date: 11/30/2015 8:40:00 AM
Thanks for the wonderful comment Pandita, and thank you for the visit.
Date: 11/28/2015 2:48:00 PM
James, Congratulations on your well-deserved win in Tammy's contest. <3 ForEver SKAT
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James Inman
Date: 11/30/2015 8:38:00 AM
Thank you SKAT
Date: 11/27/2015 4:12:00 AM
Wow..what a wonderful take of the contest..loved this poem so much..congrats on the win james.god bless :)
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James Inman
Date: 11/27/2015 6:49:00 AM
Thank you for the great comment.
Date: 11/26/2015 11:18:00 PM
Congrats on your win James! Thank you for entering into my contest.
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James Inman
Date: 11/27/2015 6:52:00 AM
Thank you Tammy, for taking the time to host a very moving contest. I've read some very beautiful entries.
Date: 11/22/2015 6:56:00 PM
You captured it well my friend. And we feel like fools for forgetting things so damn often! My uncle had it and it took 14 years to end his life at age 77. We all shall pass through that door one day. Myself, I wanted to see the doorknob and know that I was entering the light. Great entry!A7
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James Inman
Date: 11/24/2015 10:33:00 AM
Thanks Robert, sorry for your uncle. I've watched my mom slowly going through old age dementia for years and on bad days have wondered if it was just selfishness to want her to keep going on, but then on good days feeling unforgivable guilt for thinking what I did on the bad days.
Date: 11/19/2015 10:01:00 AM
Hi James: The metaphoric bathroom. Where we pause to reflect on the present and the past but won't recall the future. You really captured the dreaded Alzheimer's . Great Write!
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James Inman
Date: 11/19/2015 9:13:00 PM
Thanks for the great comment Ralph.
Date: 11/17/2015 10:03:00 AM
Hiya James. You have captured the essence of the illness perfectly. Great write ~~X~~
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James Inman
Date: 11/19/2015 9:15:00 PM
Thanks Kim., for your very nice comment.
Date: 11/16/2015 7:38:00 PM
James, love how you repeated your first two lines.... a suggestion from me though to have somewhat a better effect, try to separate the first three lines from the others.... a sudden pause for me will intensify the feeling and the imagery you rose following the succeeding lines describing your third line.. =`) (I`m sorry if my suggestion offended you) but great portrayal of the theme!~Olive Eloisa =`)
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Date: 11/18/2015 1:53:00 AM
=`) thanks much James.. =`) you are welcome... =`) I'm very humbled...
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James Inman
Date: 11/16/2015 8:47:00 PM
Olive, don't ever worry about offending me, your comments are ALWAYS welcome and appreciated. Thank you for the suggestion and I wish I had thought about it when I wrote it. Thank you.
Date: 11/16/2015 8:42:00 AM
I love it,kudos James...hugs
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Date: 11/13/2015 11:51:00 AM
Dear James First off thank you for the comments on my poetry, I'm very flattered by your remarks, glad you enjoyed them so much! Now for your poem it's a powerful poem on self reflections of growing older it is not easy, but you've expressed this topic very outstanding job here my friend, it makes the reader stop and ponder the questions concerning aging. Again bravo cheri
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James Inman
Date: 11/13/2015 1:19:00 PM
Thank you for the wonderful comment, Cheri
Date: 11/12/2015 4:04:00 PM
now THAT is a very bad morning, I'd say!! By putting that last part, you really captured the essence of this dread disease. This is one I hope to get to. An excellent writing topic, don't you think? well done.
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James Inman
Date: 11/12/2015 7:00:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, very loosely based on what I've seen in my Mom. At first I wasn't going to enter but then inspiration hit.
Date: 11/12/2015 3:53:00 PM
Very dramatic - sad subject, great write ... CayCay
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James Inman
Date: 11/12/2015 7:02:00 PM
Very sad CayCay, thanks for so many visits today.
Date: 11/12/2015 12:00:00 PM
The good mornings still come, though few and far between. Bless you for saying what too many of us have seen, see still with this disease. DMB
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James Inman
Date: 11/12/2015 12:06:00 PM
Thank you for your sweet comment, DMB.
Date: 11/12/2015 11:39:00 AM
James, absolutely wonderful writing, I felt the confusion in each well selected word, amazing 7
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James Inman
Date: 11/12/2015 12:07:00 PM
Thank you BW. I always look so forward to your visits. You make me smile.
Date: 11/12/2015 8:06:00 AM
Oh James this is heartbreaking - I dread the thought of altzheimers happening to members of my family and me:-( hugs jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2015 8:24:00 AM
mum is the exactly the same James we have good days and bad days but compared to some she has very few issues:-)hugs Jan xx
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James Inman
Date: 11/12/2015 8:15:00 AM
Yeah, my mother is 86 and has Age Related Dementia, not exactly Alzheimer's but similar, Her short term memory is very poor so she mostly lives in the past. She has her good days and bad days.

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