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Who I Thought You Were

WHO I THOUGHT YOU WERE Collaboration Poem Dave Wood and Jan Allison You've gone and broken my heart in two a thousand death night, I can't let it go Now we're simply known as me and you and together forever we will never know Crushed and bleeding is my aching heart this moonlit sky just makes me weak Packed your bags, tore my world apart wishing on stars 'cause I just can't sleep Something so good, gone terribly wrong it was in this very park where "we" began I thought our relationship was oh so strong now a lonely night's muse without my man You walked out on me, you really didn’t care hidden heart of stone a dreamer's saboteur I pull out your photograph and simply stare no longer dying for you.. but who I thought you were! 4-12-14 By: Dave Wood and Jan Allison *heartless guy dumps his girl one night in the same park where their relationship began.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/14/2014 6:13:00 PM

just saw this over at Dave's page. SO cool what you two did together. Keep it UP!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2014 6:22:00 PM

Thanks Andrea - its all down to Jared Pickett's contest that I've collaborated with three amazing poets, Jack , Darren and Dave. Sadly we can't enter this poem as in the rules I can only collaborate on 2 poems - these have already been entered, but we had a great time and I've learned a lot about myself. Hugs Jan x

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/14/2014 8:05:00 AM

I really enjoyed reading this poem. You two did a great work of writing here. I have been through the same event and ya'll nailed the situation. Awesome.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2014 9:57:00 AM

Thanks Casarah - it's not written from my own personal experience - the poem just evolved with Dave and I writing two lines each and then Dave wove his magic to create this fabulous poem. Hugs Jan x

Paul Callus

Date: 4/13/2014 11:16:00 AM

Beautiful...but sad end to a promising romance; last 2 lines convinced me to give max high rating :) another fine collaboration Jan ... and Dave :) glad to see two friends of mine working in unision! // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2014 11:24:00 AM

Hi Paul thanks for the lovely comments. I am having the time of my life collaborating with awesome poets on here am so flattered they have agreed or asked to work with me. hugs Jan xxxxx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/13/2014 7:45:00 AM

- A well written poem .... but, heartbreakingly sad .... You and Dave, collaboration well together - Have a nice Sunday :))) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2014 9:02:00 AM

Thanks Anne Lise was great working with another fabulous poet. Hugs Jan xx