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The Makeover

Love justice Those old memories are still new, My love, he was one of the very few, It occurred to us at the very first sight, a challenge to prove who was more bright, He lost to me and I lost to him, Emotions were flowing out of the brim, He left me nowhere in deep sea, Is there any love justice I could seek ? Relationships in life of love and lost, Give warmth of blood and chills of frost, What I thought was a faithful reward, Happened to be a punishment so hard, Irrefutable for life are the love demands, then why expect me follow lifeless commands ? Not a spot of bother if the world will prattle, I am onto conquering a love battle ! Passion leading with grace to life's trail, last breath of content will see love justice prevail !! Written Jan 21st, 2015 For contest "Love justice" by Justin Bordner The Makeover of "Love justice" In my memories alive, Is love at first sight, He was the one and only, Challenged me wrongly, Winning hearts in love, We were hands in glove, Passion had just sprung, He bid adieu so young, Soul cried for the love lost, Time gave me chills of frost, Drowning deeper in grief, Love justice could I plead ? Will seek love justice prevail, Till last air of content I inhale ! Written April 2nd, 2015 For contest "The makeover" by Roy Jerden Awarded 4th place win

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Date: 4/19/2015 2:05:00 PM
Sorry that I am so late on the congrats, just recently found out the contest was finalized.. Big congrats on your win!!
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Date: 4/18/2015 5:34:00 PM
Dr Upma, , congratulations on your awesome win. Luv LINDA
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Date: 4/15/2015 11:46:00 AM
Two beautiful poetic renditions of unrequited love. Best Wishes on your win!
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Date: 4/14/2015 11:56:00 AM
So nice to read your poetry this morning. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 4/5/2015 6:19:00 PM
I love both versions but this is a terrific makeover! Hope you do real well in this contest!
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