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---Blasted Cherries

blasted cherries splatter the pavement bird dropping… bloody tell trails

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Deirdre Omaidin

Date: 1/24/2011 5:02:00 AM

Fantastic third line in this senryu, love it Déirdre

Kevin Semeniuk

Date: 1/23/2011 8:24:00 PM

what a great way to look at something! there is poetry in every aspect of life. life is poetry.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 1/23/2011 10:11:00 AM

This haiku just seems so alive & visual for me, Debbie :) wonderful choice of words -- enjoyed reading this :) --hugs nikko :)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/23/2011 9:10:00 AM

15 syllables yes, the modern way to write a haiku is NOT to focus overly on the syllable count, simply UNDER 17 and short long short....

Gert W. Knop

Date: 1/23/2011 7:26:00 AM

Enjoyed reading your Haiku, Debbie! And thank you for your kind comments! Only the second line is a bit too long. an first and last line too short. Have a great week ahead!...Love, Gert

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/22/2011 6:23:00 AM

At least in the rural areas it falls onto earth and brings forth some weed or tree...Great descriptive and expressive work..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/21/2011 6:34:00 PM

thankxx for your nice comment and yes I luv dogs quite a lot... nice Senryu .. good luck if for the contest...

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/21/2011 6:23:00 AM

Thank you for sharing your wonderful poetry with us Deborah. I enjoyed reading it today. May you have a wonderful weekend and always find inspiration to continue your writing. The best to you in the contest. Love, Carol

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/21/2011 1:34:00 AM

bolting is the word, deb lights!! a stunning artwork with words..ripe for the winners' list! :) huggs, nette

Rick Parise

Date: 1/20/2011 7:49:00 PM

I thought I lost the first comment~I found it!!~excuse the ring.

Rick Parise

Date: 1/20/2011 7:48:00 PM

Nice imagery of a festive days prosper!!~SOUPMAIL!!!!!!!!

Rick Parise

Date: 1/20/2011 7:31:00 PM

Nice imagery of a festive days prosper!//////////////SOUPMAIL////////////////

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/20/2011 3:53:00 PM

Deb, I can really relate to this. I had a tree that dropped so many horrible plums, it was very annoying. This would have been a riot if you'd had the cherries covering dead ants or something. Hearts bleeding for bloody ants. haha. I enjoyed this. Andrea

James Marshall Goff

Date: 1/20/2011 2:54:00 PM

I love cherries, blasted or otherwise! now...bleeding hearts.....that's a Horse of a different color!!! jimbo