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The thing that went... The first thing that went wrong - was the buzzing in my left ear, the one not buried in the pillow, the one that was open to the world. The second thing that went wrong was that dream I was having, you know, the one where I'm gazing at you - soo beautiful, soo lustful, was receding like a cosmic dust cloud The third thing that went wrong was my sense of consciousness coming before the fourth thing but after a second I realized I was waking up to The fourth thing that went wrong the buzzing from the first was even louder now than a second ago and ticklish and I realized it had - legs The fifth thing that went wrong was me turning and sitting erect quickly not conscious enough to feel the rocking but quite able to feel the ceiling I smashed into a mere twenty-four inches above my bunk The sixth thing that went wrong was my abrupt shock from concussive smash and my equal abhorrence at the knowledge of something of the arthropod phylum dancing upon my tympanic membrane The seventh thing that went wrong was me turning off the bunk to stand erect forgetting I was on the top bunk and my feet were far away from the floor The eighth thing that went wrong was the whitened pain that cross-eyed me as my right big toe curled 180° underneath my gravitous torso pushing toward the planked floor below The ninth thing that went wrong was the piercing shout that came from my wide involuntary lips and tongue just as the Musca domestica miraculously left my ear in a fit of self-preservation The tenth thing that went wrong was the hard lateral left turn that I took just as the fly took a hard lateral right and buzzed for final clearance to land just below the epiglottis The eleventh thing that went wrong was me closing my mouth in utter surprise knowing the first thing that went right was that domestic fly - right down my throat "Good morning" you sleepily said as you blinked and smiled from your slumbering bunk I looked at you with astonishment realizing I had started the day only seconds ago, and already two things had gone right; It was gonna be a good day. © Goode Guy 2013-11-20 for the December 2013 challenge at the open-mic at Aromas coffeehouse: a first line of "The first thing that went wrong"
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