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When They Scurry

Night after night I still dream about these blocks. Dance they do, dance they don't. Seeing them hand-less in effortless glide, my mind strides so young to differ! squared, cube, these blocks move sporadic movement in dance no rhyme, reasoning Again the nights throw these scratching sounds from below my bed, dread I. In confusion scrawl, they bawl silently to me, em-blazing their letters to allure from within my abyss, this deep that haunts me, yet I know is alive. scurrying, confused to and fro they go, they show mis-spelt disarray Again I'm sitting, anticipating, yet I know where I am, I'm home, again alone. I'm under, yet bolder, shouldering at six years old, now seeing clarity, for the blocks are speaking to me, I see, now crying believe. no longer grotesque his zest upon his request blue lights alight, gone .

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/21/2015 9:24:00 AM

Creative way to go for the contest..Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/21/2015 2:04:00 AM

Congrats on another wonderful win James with this amazing haibun!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/21/2015 1:52:00 AM

The world seen through the eyes of a child James - congrats on your HM:-) hugs jan xx

James Fraser
Date: 9/8/2015 3:13:00 PM

Thank you Jan, as I've mentioned below, it's the ending to 'I'm only Six' It was alway needing an ending, hugs//James xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/21/2015 12:02:00 AM

Super fine poem. I admit , had to read it twice to get deeper into it. Once there I saw a world a child sees, one that is thrilling, exciting and often just plain scary. A7...

James Fraser
Date: 9/8/2015 3:00:00 PM

Thanks kindly Robert, it's the conclusion to 'I'm only Six' I always felt it needed an ending, James :) :)

Skat A

Date: 8/20/2015 7:29:00 PM

James, Congrats on your HM win. SKAT

James Fraser
Date: 9/8/2015 2:59:00 PM

Thank you always SKAT, James :):)

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 8/18/2015 7:34:00 AM

I have read this piece numerous times in my efforts to judge it against the other entries in my contest. But I feel that I am missing something. The comments below only reinforce that conclusion. So while I want to thank you for entering my contest, I am sorry James, but this one escapes me, and therefore will not be making my top 20. I will however give it a honourable mention, so that others can follow the link, and ponder your words.

James Fraser
Date: 9/8/2015 2:55:00 PM

No worries scott, I appreciate your comments, James :) :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/4/2015 3:33:00 PM

what an enlightened haibun.. the child in me rejoices, prince of the highlands.. darn good write!.. huggs

James Fraser
Date: 8/4/2015 4:03:00 PM

Hiya Nette, this is the conclusion to my older poem 'I'm only Six' as I've mentioned below, it was always requiring an ending. Glad you liked it, hugs always, James :) :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 8/3/2015 1:22:00 AM

James, I am glad that you come up with your haibun...Regards to the poem, this my second read, a deep, intriguing write.. The blocks is one good metaphor.. Your haiku always leave me puzzle but when I read it again and again they do strike!!! This poem has a tinge of sadness but I like that on the third there is that survival attitude of the child.... =')! hugs and hugs!~Olive Eloisa =')

James Fraser
Date: 8/4/2015 4:02:00 PM

Hey Olive, this is the conclusion to 'I'm only Six' of which I always knew it needed an ending. Hugs aplenty for you soon little one~~James xxx

James Peranteau

Date: 8/1/2015 9:40:00 PM

A fantastic Haibun dear poet. I read this like three times to get a visual of my past childhood, cause I fear that I am one of those late bloomers<~~~~you may repartee that sentence sir *smiles* I read it actually because of all of those Alpha'blocks with all the children of mine ! This write reminded me that I am on my last block'scapade ! Loved it my friend ! Have a great coming up week James...much love, james...P.S..love those Castles on FB !

James Fraser
Date: 8/4/2015 3:32:00 PM

Hiya James, yes indeed these Castles, all within driving distance from where I stay. So dark, mystical, mysterious they are and their settings are simply stunning. Glad you liked this piece, as it's a little follow up to my poem 'I'm only Six' - blessed weekend ahead to you Sir James~~James :) :)