To Fly

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    May- 13- 2025 Pick a Title- Vol. 51. Poetry Contest Sponsor- Edward Ibeh ~PLACED FIRST~

 

Confined within rusty iron bars,
   grounded eternally 
            to hop and trip,
wishing to fly 
into Heaven’s starry bower,
      a bird b e a t s her wings in vain,
voicing her anguish in tremulous trills.


There is hunger
   at every tip of her feather
to fly and flutter
      through the pathless air,
piping melodious tunes
      to drown the earth,
seeing lands never eyed
 by anyone before.


Nursing her dreams,
     she beats her wings again,
to reach a place where the soul sings.
                

     Alas! 
The clamour of her beating
 resounds,
        and she falls asleep exhausted!
In her sleep, 
     her desires limp back. 
She dreams of shooting
                 into higher altitudes,
   and becoming a speck
     among fleecy clouds.
            

But she knows 
   the sky that stretches limitless
is a premise
      far beyond her reach.


As she sees birds in flock
                 flying away, 
to seamless ends 
    sculpting sweet images, 
          in her vision, 
she sees herself soaring high
       and she beats her wings
              again and again, 
       to feel tired 
    and feeling tired to fall asleep,
and in her snooze, 
          to d r e a m again! 




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Date: 5/19/2025 9:01:00 AM
Heartiest congratulations dear friend on your top win in this contest with an exquisite poem with the extended imagery of a bird seeking to soar up high from its jail of rusted iron bars. The journey seems to be the journey of your own soul seeking liberation from the body`s jail. Wish you a pleasant week.
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Date: 5/18/2025 10:40:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Have a blessed day with your win................
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Date: 5/14/2025 6:47:00 AM
Dear Valsa, this is a breathtakingly beautiful piece—its rhythm mirrors the beating of wings, a dance between hope and despair. The imagery of the bird's yearning for boundless skies, despite her confinement, captures the essence of longing with such raw elegance. The cycle of dreaming and trying again speaks to an unyielding spirit, a testament to resilience even in the face of impossible odds. Absolutely stunning!
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Date: 5/13/2025 3:38:00 PM
I like where you took this. To a deeper level by using the metaphor of a caged bird. Great work, Valsa
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Date: 5/13/2025 8:41:00 AM
A very deeply moving and heartfelt poem this is dear valsa, youv written a poem that would make readers feel the anguish and longing to fly away! To attain eternal nirvana and freedom! How profound and evocative too! I especially love your arrangement of words and how they flow in such an easy and eloquent manner, your words always are flawless! I especially love the lines “ But she knows the sky that stretches limitless is a premise far beyond her reach.” i felt those words so strongly! Someday she will learn to fly! Until then. this goes into my faves ! Pleasure reading! Best wishes! Sending you light always
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Date: 5/13/2025 7:04:00 AM
lovely expression of one's desire for freedom and the right to explore all possibilities leading to self actualization...a gem, valsa!
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Date: 5/13/2025 4:53:00 AM
What a metaphor! You are a bird longing to soar high and sing loud! A bird dreaming to fly high "seeing lands never eyed before "! My dear Valsa, You are a poetess who cannot accept to be confined to the limitations of a grounded world.. wishing to always fly on the wings of her words and wonderful poetry to realms of beauty, wonder and inspiration.. carving her very gems, composing her very songs, writing her very legacy.. Despite all that would hamper you my dear poetess, always thriving rising again and again to write amazing poetry! So much enjoyed reading you! My warmest wishes. Love and hugs.
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