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“We may think of freedom, not as the right thing to do, but as the opportunity to do what is right.” ~~Peter Marshall~~ "Need I say this was inspired by the television program, the Twilight Zone? Each episode began with this introduction, prior to the story." ~~The Poet~~ There is a 6th dimension beyond that which is known to man. It is a dimension as vast as space and as timeless as infinity. It is the middle ground between light and shadows and science and superstition. It lies between the pit of man’s fears and the summit of his knowledge. An area that might be called the twilight Zone. You are about to take an excursion into the odd and very, very different 6th dimension and unlock a key to imagination beyond the dimension of sound, site and mind. A land of imagination, of shadow and substance of things and ideas. You have now crossed over to the Twilight Zone. Jack woods was to be locked up in this jail for two more years and would have done just about anything to get out and be free. One day in the exercise yard he started to talk to old Smithy. Smithy was what was called a trustee. He had been in jail for sixty years and had another two years to serve. He had been refused parole more times than he could count. He had killed his wife and was glad he did. Smith told Jack that he had a load of cash stashed in a safe place on the outside and needed someone to get it to his Granddaughter. Jack reminded Smithy that they both had two years left on their sentence, and would be out at the same time. Smithy told Jack he had a way of getting him out next week. Smithy was in charge of a burial site being prepared when an inmate died. He would take a strong young prisoner with him to the small cemetery outside the prison walls, under the watchful eye of a guard. He told Jack that he would supervise the plot being dug, arrange the coffin to be brought out, wait til the prison Chaplain said a few words and give the order for the grave to be filled in. Jack immediately said “I wanna be ALIVE when I get out thanks.” “Its OK” said Smithy I used to be a medic. I visit the infirmary bay regularly with my various ailments. I have procured an amount of a medicine they use to induce a coma on a patient. I can give you just enough to make it look like you are not alive for an hour, and then I will dig you up as soon as they clear out. It takes an hour at most”. Jack asked, “Why would you do all this for me? “ Smithy answered “ My granddaughter needs the money.” Next day Smithy brought Jack a small vile with a few drops of liquid in it. “The old doctor likes a drop of the Warden’s whiskey in the afternoons. Take a couple of drops of this and the doctor being tipsy at my suggestion will pronounce you dead.” said Smithy. He continued “I will get you buried and come back later to dig you up and you will be free. You can keep half the money, that you retrieve for me and find my Granddaughter and give her the other half.” The plan worked like clockwork. Jack took the drops of serum. The old drunk doc pronounced him dead. Smith had him put in a king-sized coffin and he supervised the burial. Jack came to awareness, feeling groggy but quite well. He had room to shuffle around in the coffin so he could get comfortable. Soon he heard voices. “Ah” He thought “here was Smithy to dig me up.” He could hear digging and he heard people talking. They were talking about Smithy. It was a service for Smithy, he was dead. He could hear the voices fading as they moved away. He screamed but no one heard him, they had all gone. Jack had entered the Twilight Zone.

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Date: 4/5/2024 1:39:00 PM
Many congratulations dear Wen on your very worthy top medal placement. This is so well written highlighting your wonderful storytelling immense skills. I found the story very gripping from start to finish. Really draws the reader in. I wanted to scream for the man at the end, ‘ He could hear the voices fading as they moved away’. A real sense of horror, panic and realisation. He certainly had entered the Twilight Zone. Great writing and an enthralling read from you dear friend. Well done. Xx
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Date: 4/4/2024 10:47:00 AM
I'm gonna have to look up the old series - always loved watching it as a kid. Your did a fantastic job my dear Wen! Congratulations! :)
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Date: 4/4/2024 3:55:00 PM
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment Laf my dear friend.
Date: 4/3/2024 12:35:00 PM
Congrats on the impressive win, my friend. I have seen movies of people buried alive. It must be so horrendous!
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Date: 4/4/2024 3:51:00 PM
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment Andrea
Date: 4/3/2024 3:57:00 AM
I was a fan of the Twighlight zone. This also has flavours of Shawshank Redemption. Congratulations on your medal performance.
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Date: 4/4/2024 3:52:00 PM
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment Richard
Date: 4/2/2024 12:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! I entered too late,lol.
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Date: 4/4/2024 3:54:00 PM
Thank you so much for your comment Anaya. I have been doing that a bit lately too. Thinking I had plenty of time and the contest fills quickly.
Date: 4/2/2024 8:51:00 AM
Great storytelling. Wen. A real thriller...Congratulations on your placement in Tom's contest! Charlie
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Date: 4/4/2024 3:55:00 PM
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment Charlie.
Date: 3/27/2024 12:35:00 PM
Yes, that familiar introduction, classic. You should post the intro video! Smithy so pithy is he, has set up a grave for Jack's entry, bust out of jail well to no avail what did he think in the 6th dimension, not to mention, a coma induced, a twist was defused when Smithy's cruel humor became revealing! The hair stood on my arms. Very good had me hooked until the very end, my friend. True to the Twilight Zone tales!
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Date: 3/27/2024 1:28:00 PM
ah looped. That is a thriller and quit disturbing for a kiddo. You did a perfect ending. I think I'll watch some episodes, I watched Hitchcock old episodes, since I get 'em with the TV stuff, they're so corny they're good! T.Z. gives chills!
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Date: 3/27/2024 1:05:00 PM
Love your comment Anaya. The video that I found of the intro repeated it about 4 times. I thought it was a bit much ! That episode of Twilight Zone owed me big time. I had nightmares for weeks after watching that as a kid and imagining the poor dude slowly dying in that box. The actual episode had him waking up to find Smith lying beside him, but I couldn't remember how that could have come about, so I made up my own ending. Glad you liked it. Twilight filled wishes.. Wen. : )
Date: 3/27/2024 2:42:00 AM
Great tale and well told. I'm just thinking, that is my sort of luck.
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Date: 3/27/2024 4:41:00 AM
I don't think I wish that fate on anyone, Paul. Glad you liked it. Thanks for letting me know. Best wishes Wen

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