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From the anthology, Scenes From the Cerebellum, a work in progress. This piece was a mental trip back in time when I attended Catholic mass as a child, and being enthralled with the beautiful singing in Latin, by the Girls choir.

The Translucent Loft The girls choir at St. Mary’s still sings there. Shh, be quiet as we step inside through these green rectangular doors, Shh! Listen... We can hear them up there, in the translucent loft. They are still cloistered upstairs in the saintly glow, of stained glass fortissimos, and bare knees, dressed in blue sweaters with plaid beanies doffed upon the three dozen crowns of the virgin sainted; And now before us, the majesty of the holy sanctuary, the deep eternity of ever-swallowing horizontal constictions, upon which the devout might meditate the spirit mysteries, with blessed rosaries, scapulars, and communion wafers, bristling miraculously upon flaming tongues of fire. “Shh! Be quiet here in the church, it is a sin to talk!” We must fold our hands in silent contrition to an invisible God. We must say our prayers, memorized from old missals. We must genuflect on bended leg, making the sign of the cross. But still, a likeness of our creator, dead and naked, Nailed and bloody, with sickening thorns and gushing crimson, hangs before us most ignominiously, a dead creator. How can this be, Father Flanagan? Why are we being reminded of this, Monsignor Molthen? Why dear saints?, all ye there, encrusted immaculately, in stone cold tableaux, absorbed forever and today, in emerald stained glass transfigurations, way up there, high on the upper reaches of this long heavenly nave, that stretches out like long arms wearing bracelets of infinity. Why are we to be reminded of this? The girls choir at St. Mary’s still sings there. Shh, be quiet as we step outside through these green rectangular doors. Shh! Listen... We can still hear them up there, in the translucent loft.

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Date: 2/7/2019 9:23:00 AM
I enjoyed the bookend form you used. The mid-section is heavy. Made me think of a Shaw quote, "The best place to find God is in a garden. You can dig for him there." Not that it should be changed, but it would be interesting to try and put the line, “Shh! Be quiet here in the church, it is a sin to talk!” in the middle. Balancing the weight like art's composition style fulcrum. But then again, what you did is just as wonderful. I'm no critic. Hope never to be. Very nice piece.
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Date: 2/7/2019 9:28:00 AM
Thanks Jeff for stopping by and reading my newest work. And also thanks for your comments. At first, I did offset and separate the quote about not talking in church, to ease up the heaviness of the middle part, then decided to put it all together into one big chunk. Oh well, poetry composition is a never-ending endeavor. Thanks again!

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