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The old rusty gate opens to 
                             an abode left abruptly, with no premonition,
                              a porch where playthings were scattered.  
                              on splendid summer days, huge windows
                                  smelt of drenched khuskhus herbs 
                               from their coverings. an abundant orchard 
                                  smelt ambrosial from plump juicy 
                                fruits of shady Guava and Mango trees! 

                             Chrysanthemums and Dahlias - emitted 
                             delicate fragrance - Roses, encircled with 
                             ferns! the swing -  symbol of an exuberant 
                             childhood - the laughter, the chatter, 
                             exhilarating friends, unforgettable scent of 
                             Jasmine flowers on the ground, crystal 
                            dewdrops glistening on petals, at rosy dawn!
 
                                 the resonating music has ceased, 
                                  the gorgeous colours are lost!
                                  feisty birds stopped tweeting. 
                             I decided not to open the shell of memory, 
                              and find the coveted pearl of a lost love! 
                                    the vision doesn't leave me!
 
                                  The crumbling gate creaks open... 
                            only eerie whispers of the blowing wind I hear -
                               black and white photographs on the walls, 
                             unpainted for long, exude bleak sadness ! 
 
                              an ornate vase, immensely treasured once, 
                                       left on the floor uncared, 
                               once-valued carvings on the ceiling 
                                        are caving in, in melancholy.
                             lonely, dusty, staircase which was once a refuge 
                                for giggling children playing hide-and-seek, 
                                               has no footprints!

                                    The old, rusty gate creaks open
                                             to memories locked 
                                               to last a lifetime! 



                                                  June 22, 2022 
                                      "One In Five" Poetry Contest
                                       Theme: The Old Rusty Gate
                                            Sponsor: Joseph May

Copyright © | Year Posted 2022




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Date: 7/11/2022 8:40:00 PM
A melancholic and gloomy scene masterly painted. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/11/2022 5:24:00 PM
Congrats on your win Malabika, Nicely done
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Date: 6/26/2022 1:39:00 PM
Haunting!
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Date: 6/23/2022 12:16:00 PM
I too have memories - a family summer home on an island off of Seattle. My memories take me back there often, especially in the summer, just as your words take you back to this very special place in both plaintive and happy emotions. It is so emotive especially the lines about the vase on the floor - empty! That is a very powerful image - what you left behind! Your love and your longing are spoken so clearly! Best wishes for the contest dear friend. Blessings Mala!
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Date: 6/23/2022 5:08:00 AM
I can so well relate.... ! This is the sad plight of my ancestral home which lies deserted after my parents' death. Once it was renovated. But as no one lives there, it is back to its former state, but still proclaiming its old glory. Your poem has brought a torrent of memories into me, Mala ..... ! All the Best!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/23/2022 5:42:00 AM
Dear Valsa, So glad you read this poem! This is a real story...a house I lived in for a few years in my childhood. Due to an accident to my mother, we left overnight. I was so attached to this cottage-like home, I don't want to go back and witness the decaying place. Love ~ Mala
Date: 6/22/2022 11:11:00 PM
Very touching nostalgic narration. Best wishes for the contest.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/23/2022 5:38:00 AM
Thank you for reading my poem, Dear Poet. Appreciate your thoughtful comments. I often read your brilliant poems...and get inspired!

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