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August.6.2023
'S' Words Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Constance La France
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"For those who love with heart and soul, there is no such thing as separation" ~By Rumi
Decked in floral wreaths and crown as I lay in state among family and friends with my spirit wading through strands forlorn where lamps shone bright in celestial gleam bordering a land of bliss out of mortal reach where neither canker blights, nor flowers wilt where sorrow never enters and all shall be blest where each head like the sun aureoled where God in all His glory doth reign I saw through my slumber deep, as through a veil my loved ones grieving great, my journey unreturned to an untravelled land. There was crying and whining, sighing and sobbing in stirring memory of days in all goodness spent and of bonds stretching beyond life's rim which set me feel sick of where I was and where I wasn't so fain to go, so fain to stay, like a spinning midge, my spirit veered high and low between Heaven and Earth between Mortality and Immortality. a helium balloon buoyant in the air.

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Date: 8/10/2023 4:55:00 AM
Congrats on you win my friend. A really top-class poem this one is!! A gem and a very fine fav.. God bless.
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Date: 8/9/2023 12:16:00 PM
wow, such a deep topic. I bet there really ARE those who straggle and perhaps they remain behind a while to view their own funerals. Who knows!! Congrats on your win.
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Date: 8/9/2023 9:07:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A creative write/picture. I enjoyed the read. Have a great day.............
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Date: 8/8/2023 3:57:00 PM
A beautiful homecoming-like poem! You captured it with a lot of emotion!
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Date: 8/7/2023 3:41:00 PM
While I don't believe in the concept of an immortal soul/spirit, I can say that your excellent poetry reflects the belief of many
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Date: 8/7/2023 11:50:00 AM
Valsa, nice poem.
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Date: 8/7/2023 3:10:00 AM
Yes, I think at times we do velocitate between going and staying. Only God can call us home though. I enjoyed reading this creative one. Thank you for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 8/6/2023 1:09:00 PM
In that day the Lord Almighty will be a glorious crown, a beautiful wreath for the remnant of his people. He will be a spirit of justice to the one who sits in judgment, a source of strength to those who turn back the battle at the gate. Isaiah 28:5?-?6 NIV Love your poems my dear friend, what a blessing to read , thanks for sharing your beautiful gift with us all : )
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Date: 8/6/2023 8:30:00 AM
breathtaking in eloquence....Richard Feynman, the great physicist, had on his security clearances that he talked to his wife. they cannot grasp. there are those to whom there is no veil as Rumi so wonderfully acknowledges. in quantum entanglement one particle can affect another on the other side of the universe without any particle being responsible....time and space do not exist for those who know, the veil does not exist
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Date: 8/6/2023 7:55:00 AM
Dear Valsa, How eloquent and poignant your words. Reaching me through the tapestry of your emotions brilliantly painted. This journey so deep . I love ~ and of bonds stretching beyond life’s rim. Your ability to perceive yourself and others through these moments is rich and textured. Loved it ! Hugs, Susan :)
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Date: 8/6/2023 6:10:00 AM
Oh, Valsa, what a profoundly articulated poem you have composed. Through your exquisite deployment of metaphors and meticulously chosen verbiage, you courageously venture into the unfathomable depths of human emotions, unraveling not only the sublime of the untravelled land but also the enduring recollections of cherished moments and beloved ones during this exquisite dream. Best wishes for the contest.
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