Lin Lane Poet Free verse

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Stars Shimmering in the Night

How quickly I became intoxicated,
inebriated on this bewitching night
while watching the luminance of starlight.
I drank deeply of the view with heart and soul
beyond my limit...  beyond control,
so mesmerized was I by the radiant gleaming.
Stars seemed to sway and sparkle
as if they were dancing in the velvet night,
shimmering in the patterned steps of a waltz.

Through a blackened hole of stellar mass
I continued to tumble among mordant shadows.
Sober enough to admit that I was traveling
in space while hearing a celestial melody.
A hymnal song written by the Master Virtuoso,
played throughout the hallowed heavens.
Lyrics that only angel's voices are allowed to sing.

The grandeur of starlight washed over me
and inveigled a symphony of senses in my mind
until at last, I was able to fully comprehend
the pellucid meaning of their inscriptions.
I'd been granted a mere glimpse of their secrets
in the realm where fulgent stardust whispers
of what was, what is, and of what will be 
long after the light within me has dimmed.

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Duke Beaufort April 9, 2025 at 11:21 AM Lin, you've composed a very spiritual and deep interpretation of the night sky. I like the fact that you're hearing a hymnal. Very potent experience to be that close to being one with the universe for a short time, and yes, it will be here for a while after we've had our turn to look at it all. Fantastic experience! Smiles!! Lin Lane April 9, 2025 at 12:08 PM Thank you for such accolades, Duke. Sometimes I can almost feel like I'm the places I write about.

CayCay Godwin April 4, 2025 at 3:09 PM '.. a mere glimpse of their secrets' - that WORKS, that's the thought I have when focused on the galaxy, plus this one 'long after the light within me has dimmed. A lovely free verse with imagery souls can dance to ... CayCay Lin Lane April 4, 2025 at 3:23 PM Thanks, my sweet friend. Love your comments.

Terry Flood April 3, 2025 at 4:01 PM Lin, your depiction of ‘this bewitching night’ is, in itself, bewitching. The last few nights, overhead, have been unusually clear, here, and the stars as sharp and bright as I can ever recall… hey! This is England! Loved your write, with those closing lines feeling quite profound right now. Superb. Terry Lin Lane April 3, 2025 at 4:23 PM Nights here have been conducive to clearly seeing the celestial skies. Merci with humility for your feeling profound, Terry.

Yann Rolland April 3, 2025 at 3:49 PM your poem fascinates me, i adore stars and science we have o many things to learn, this is deep and beautifully written, thanks Lin Lane April 3, 2025 at 4:20 PM Your words are welcome thoughts. Thank you, Yann.

David Kavanagh April 3, 2025 at 1:18 PM Metaphorically the light within us all will dim eventually, but it will still be stardust and capable of recycling back into energy and life, but enough of that! your poem is top notch with wonderful cosmic imagery intermixed with humanity, and a vocabulary to match, great one for contest Lin, cheers David Lin Lane April 3, 2025 at 4:19 PM I was hoping to impose the thought that I was actually somewhere in the realm of stars, observing them up close and personally. I’ll gladly embrace your ‘cosmic imagery’ as the sanctum I was hoping to describe. Thank you very much, David.

Ink Empress April 3, 2025 at 6:21 AM This is so ethereal and absolutely gorgeous and so dreamy! Did you dream these lines and quickly wake up and write them down? As they are stunning and so many lines i wish i had written like “ I drank deeply of the view with heart and soul beyond my limit... beyond control, so mesmerized was I by the radiant gleaming.” just stunning! And the celestial ambience youve crafted from your artistic quill is beyond impeccable! I bet this will be a top winner! The softness and glistening glow that emanates from your lines truly left me in awe inspired! So deeply moving and soulful too! Best wishes! Sending you light always dear linnersz Lin Lane April 3, 2025 at 6:29 AM Ink, often I read your detailed comments and think, "Her review is better free verse poetry than my poem." Very seldom do I dream because I never sleep long enough at one time to get so deeply into it to dream. Thank you, Ink. You are a light.