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Stars Of Clarity

I still reminisce when it was raining incessantly at 3:55 a.m. in the nascent ticks of time on a wistful wednesday. My skin felt the spark of crying hail and maybe, the snow-storms melted too quickly upon my silenced lips that night. As seconds slowly slipped away like salted teardrops, I recognised how my saviour's silhouette has always risen above and pulsated squishy waves of cleansing with her swarovski wings. In hoaxed hours, when my soul is drenched in weeping sycamore's sadness, I have always felt the soft brushing away of dried textures from my palette of forlorn feelings. Dwelling between forsaken moments, I became that imperfect paper in memory on which she draws coral constellations with crayons of sherbet-smeared hope. Like an armored angel beneath the smile of this sun's kin, a lachrymose gold-washed sunflower, her face was the only vision that kept this conscience alive inspite of my numbed flesh. Perhaps, I became an insomniac poppy during that twilight, who was missing being smothered by her addictive halo who could distinguish her from black rose's cold smirks.
I could always count my gossamer manifestations in fleeting seconds within her pixie-touch, shielding me with her aurous lullabies like waterlily's velveteen breeze. Slowly dewy eyelashes tickled themselves to sleep, as I wished for her to envelop my spirit in a million sparkles of magick-an enchantment, that can bedazzle dulcet dove-like eyes of the heavens. Praying, if her voice could forever float upon foamy estuaries of saturnine sentiments filled in the valleys that bridged the distance between a motherly crimson aura and a daughter's dreamscape in those befogged days.
That midnight of massacred dandelions brought a rusty tide of realisation where each earthen grain mischievously owned its flavorsome horizons within this blossoming saga of two feminine flowers, bonded in the sunshine's strings of a mother-daughter hue. She became my lavender lifeline once again, that swirls within pearlescent throbs of me, who is her hymnal heartbeat. Her marine perfume pumps empathetic potions within these seashell-shaped stars in my eyes as I breathe her compassionate love in every misty moment, forevermore.
Inseparable and so pure, an eden's love, of mother and child Her feathers sketch me with white confetti shades in stars of clarity She, my rose-healer, ruling above moonless times, evermore, a bliss.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023




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Date: 12/7/2023 1:38:00 PM
A wondrous and enchanting dreamscape, Hiya. So stunningly beauteous. All the best to you. ~
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Date: 12/5/2023 5:13:00 AM
Very descriptive and expressive work you have penned in this one. I wonder who this rose healer might be. Sara K
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Date: 12/4/2023 7:11:00 PM
Dear Hiya. Your poem is replete with vibrant language and imagery. I adore how you interact with your mother, and I wish that all daughters experience the same. An extraordinary poem that explores the strength and emotions inherent in maternal affection. Your eloquence in expressing that affection is evident in both your prose and haikus. Hearty Congratulations on your certainly merited top winner.
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Date: 12/4/2023 2:28:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place in this contest
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Date: 12/4/2023 12:33:00 AM
This is so touching dear hiya, i just love the way you’ve described the love you and your mom share, and the flow of descriptive and creative diction is beyond beautiful and touching, and so very poetically pleasing to the eyes, i love how you’ve started it and also theres so many lines that just stood out for me beyond i could praise, it is definitely worthy of a first place, not just for your eloquence bur also how evocative and soulful this write is, haibun yes must be more prose, but-
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/4/2023 12:34:00 AM
The word weaving here is too good and it speaks to my soul, so i cant help but be in awe and place this as a first place winner! Very well delivered , definitely a fave for me too. Congratulations on your win
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/4/2023 12:34:00 AM
The word weaving here is too good and it speaks to my soul, so i cant help but be in awe and place this as a first place winner! Very well delivered , definitely a fave for me too. Congratulations on your win
Date: 12/1/2023 4:11:00 PM
an outstanding poem about the power and feelings associated with motherly love. You've expressed that love so eloquently both in your prose and in your Haikus. I liked: lavender lifeline--an exquisite imagine. Have a pleasant evening, Sara
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Date: 12/1/2023 12:17:00 PM
---where each earthen grain mischievously owned its flavorsome horizons within this blossoming saga of two feminine flowers-- She became my lavender lifeline once again, that swirls within pearlescent throbs of me, who is her hymnal heartbeat--How wonderful is that! Reminiscing in beloved memories that resonate in heart and mind forever. A FAVE from me for this stunning poem on motherly love in opulent descriptions, Hiya.
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Date: 12/1/2023 11:47:00 AM
Please remember that for a haibun the opening is written in prose, which is ordinary writing without the use of so much metaphors.. its like how you would talk.. however your poem has been written with a lot of emotions and so many metaphorical descriptions.. It is a lovely poem about your relationship with your mother, which every daughter should have.. you are lucky to have such a wonderful mum a is your mum lucky to have such a sweet devoted child.. good luck in the contest.
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Date: 12/1/2023 1:08:00 AM
Hiya.... I feel mesmerized by the sweetness of love you both feel. Your words and verses and your ability to come up with sagacious observations about others' poetry that flow instantaneously greatly surprises me and fills me with overwhelming admiration. Both you and Ink Empress who made your debut appearance into Poetry Soup are equally gifted and we are drawn to your great versification. "Like an armored angel beneath the smile of this sun's kin, a lachrymose gold-washed sunflower, her face was the only vision that kept this conscience alive inspite of my numbed flesh" . A benign presence can bring so much of sunshine into a life. Let the sweet memory of her continue to "draw coral constellations with crayons of sherbet-smeared hope" on your blank paper! Lovely haibun. A great entry. All the best Hiya.
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