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Serenading Sunset

SERENADING SUNSET I watch you walk into fast fading sunset Alone I stand here in cool shading sunset What I have now are memories left behind Reminders of love in cascading sunset I think of those days when we went for a ride Laughter ringing in serenading sunset We had what you'd call the connection of hearts Bright bubbles of hope in crusading sunset I wonder sometimes what went wrong between us Glimpses of glitches in brocading sunset If I got another chance, I'd make amends Show you my deepest love in wading sunset I would take you to that pinnacle of joy If only you held me in raiding sunset I would lay my heart at your feet once again If only you stopped this invading sunset Will you not look back and smile at me once more? Sobs rack my soul in masquerading sunset I, Jo hold my breath as you slowly come back Our love soars higher in persuading sunset. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~ 11 syllables per line 08.31.2020 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~

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Date: 10/5/2020 11:40:00 AM
Jo, I love ghazals and I especially love this one of yours. Very well-crafted. Congratulations on your well-deserved win!
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Date: 10/3/2020 6:20:00 PM
Congrats on your win .
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Date: 10/3/2020 11:51:00 AM
Brilliant write, congratulations on your first placement
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Date: 10/3/2020 5:56:00 AM
Very lovely Jo. Congratulations on the win! Linda
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Date: 10/3/2020 4:50:00 AM
Loved this poem, its flows so well and is a dedication of love... Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
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Date: 9/1/2020 6:42:00 AM
Great use of form Jo, best wishes...
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Date: 9/1/2020 2:43:00 AM
- A beautiful poem, Jo :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise
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Date: 8/31/2020 4:45:00 PM
A great metaphor with the sunset. Very touching with such scenic words and phrases. Good luck in the contest Jo Daniel. Take care.
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Date: 8/31/2020 12:35:00 PM
Lovely write. Don't know why but writing a Ghazal seems to me as one the hardest tasks lol. You did great. Good luck for the contest.
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Date: 8/31/2020 12:24:00 PM
Much depth in this reflective write
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Date: 8/31/2020 8:42:00 AM
Enjoyed the introspection in this ode to sunset. A lovely write, Jo, immersed in verses of love.
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