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for me ... I stretch a coursing arm ... my fleshy tendril of electric actuality, spanning fingers wide to encompass my full and fiercely sensual quarry ... I touch the tapestry of you - silken warmth of anticipation, digits close around absolution and imagination, so I draw it all gently, quietly, IN to the blackness - the inky pool of obscurity that I yet inhabit ... now ... close, ever gentle, your eyes ... do you perceive the wonder?? There is NO light there, yet ... it is NOT empty - no blackness but that which holds a million instances of energy and color! A maelstrom, indescribable that you rarely consider, yet it swims there subliminal with every blink ... a world of dark mystery AND seemingly enigmatic chaos, pulling, subconsciously, on your being, thousands of times EACH day ... such beauty herein - such extraordinary sublimity and pulse ... do you feel it? Can you own it? Does it pervade the sinewy substance, thine? Does that soft veil of vitality close warm arms about you? See! Do not open your eyes ... don't fall to that aberration, for there is a permeation of static noise inside your lids ... stay true to that conundrum, and spread your senses, all ... there is an awakening here, I know ... it's an honesty and verity not known to the many - I am on the other side of it, saturated and whole ... let it absorb your being, allow it to soak the essence of you, and your eyes will alter - sharpen focus ... slowly, they'll adjust with your spirit, and a new reality shall swath you in its tender cloak ... sacrifice the bright, for those without eyes - know a truth, astounding ... and live again ... for me. ~ 5th Place ~ in the "Open Poetry 3" Poetry Contest, Charlotte Puddifoot, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 4/25/2021 5:51:00 AM
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/25/2021 7:10:00 AM
Thank you so much! :o)
Date: 4/25/2021 5:00:00 AM
wonderful read, such a deep and sensual piece, the words caress.."i touch the tapestry of you" - that's a great line..it was a difficult contest to judge (aren't they always!?) i placed it in 5th due to that little word 'thine' lol i also felt there was a lot of punctuation, ellipses, i know this is your style, but for me it can sometimes distract rather than enhance..congrats on your win in my contest!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/25/2021 7:09:00 AM
You don't like the word "thine"? I believe that "classic" words should be kept alive and utilized just as much as "modern" words, like the many colors of a painting, they are important tools, and connect young people to a wider variety of art. I use ellipses for a slight pause to consider the phrase before them. Bottom line - no worries - YOU are the judge, and I completely respect your opinion and decisions! Thank you so very kindly for my placement - blessings!
Date: 4/20/2021 7:23:00 AM
I left a comment on FB, this is one of your best G, a fave...of course!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/25/2021 7:04:00 AM
Thanks so much, John - so greatly appreciated, my friend! :o)

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