Sacrifice Your Light

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for me ...

I stretch a coursing arm ...
      my fleshy tendril of electric
         actuality, spanning fingers
   wide to encompass my full
and fiercely sensual quarry ...

      I touch the tapestry of you -
         silken warmth of anticipation,
   digits close around absolution
and imagination, so I draw it
      all gently, quietly, IN to the
         blackness - the inky pool of
   obscurity that I yet inhabit ...

now ...

      close, ever gentle, your eyes ...
         do you perceive the wonder??
   There is NO light there, yet ...
it is NOT empty - no blackness
      but that which holds a million
         instances of energy and color!
   A maelstrom, indescribable that
you rarely consider, yet it swims
      there subliminal with every blink ...
         a world of dark mystery AND
   seemingly enigmatic chaos,
pulling, subconsciously, on your
      being, thousands of times EACH
         day ...

   such beauty herein - such
extraordinary sublimity and
      pulse ... do you feel it? Can
         you own it? Does it pervade
   the sinewy substance, thine?
Does that soft veil of vitality
      close warm arms about you?

         See! Do not open your eyes ... 
   don't fall to that aberration,
for there is a permeation of
      static noise inside your lids ...
         stay true to that conundrum,
   and spread your senses, all ...

there is an awakening here,
      I know ... it's an honesty and
         verity not known to the many -
   I am on the other side of it,
saturated and whole ... let it
      absorb your being, allow it to
         soak the essence of you, and
   your eyes will alter - sharpen
focus ...

      slowly, they'll adjust with your
         spirit, and a new reality shall
   swath you in its tender cloak ...
sacrifice the bright, for those
      without eyes - know a truth,
         astounding ... and live again ...

   for me.







~ 5th Place ~  in the "Open Poetry 3" Poetry Contest, Charlotte Puddifoot, Judge & Sponsor.

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Christuraj Alex

Date: 4/25/2021 5:51:00 AM

Congratulations!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/25/2021 7:10:00 AM

Thank you so much! :o)

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 4/25/2021 5:00:00 AM

wonderful read, such a deep and sensual piece, the words caress.."i touch the tapestry of you" - that's a great line..it was a difficult contest to judge (aren't they always!?) i placed it in 5th due to that little word 'thine' lol i also felt there was a lot of punctuation, ellipses, i know this is your style, but for me it can sometimes distract rather than enhance..congrats on your win in my contest!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/25/2021 7:09:00 AM

You don't like the word "thine"? I believe that "classic" words should be kept alive and utilized just as much as "modern" words, like the many colors of a painting, they are important tools, and connect young people to a wider variety of art. I use ellipses for a slight pause to consider the phrase before them. Bottom line - no worries - YOU are the judge, and I completely respect your opinion and decisions! Thank you so very kindly for my placement - blessings!

John Hamilton

Date: 4/20/2021 7:23:00 AM

I left a comment on FB, this is one of your best G, a fave...of course!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/25/2021 7:04:00 AM

Thanks so much, John - so greatly appreciated, my friend! :o)