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One Step Closer To the Edge

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Beset by doubts before I rise from bed Problems prey on my worrisome mind My ability to reason has been maligned Cockamamie notions fill me with dread I see in the mirror, a disgruntled reflection the haggard expression on my vexed face I wear a frown that's been plastered in place Malaise of despair poisons me with infection On the edge of a mountain, lost in thought always hungry and thirsty for peace of mind It's been illusive to me, or have I been blind Wanting to do what's right, but falling short My past hovers in stygian clouds overhead I haven't always made the wisest decisions, which worries me to the point of derision My sanity is in question, so lightly I tread Conscience wallowing, sinking in quicksand I'm standing at the fork of two raging rivers My legs are trembling and my lip quivers Crying for help; someone to take my hand Would if I could, be a model of perfection My psyche is shackled by chaotic unrest Sagacity abandoned me; life is a mental test I second guess myself with fear of rejection I climbed back up to that mountain ledge engrossed by waves crashing beneath me Contemplating an idea to set my mind free I wearily move one step closer to the edge 8/27/2017

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Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 9/4/2017 11:15:00 PM

Congratulations on your well deserved win, Lin, with a beautiful poem.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/7/2017 7:58:00 AM

thank you

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 9/4/2017 11:46:00 AM

Awesome, Line. Congrats on your win.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/7/2017 7:58:00 AM

thank you

John Hamilton

Date: 9/4/2017 11:12:00 AM

What can I say Lin, you are always in the winners circle(it seems to me) in my contests, another stellar write, congrats on another great win!

Lin Lane
Date: 9/7/2017 7:58:00 AM

Thank you, John.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 9/1/2017 9:39:00 PM

Brilliant poem, Lin. Simply brilliant. The underlying dark tone, the wistful desire for happiness ... the awareness of where one's mental state is at, near the breaking point. Masterfully written by a golden pen wordsmith. Your poetry shines! Love and joy always.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/2/2017 7:10:00 AM

Thanks so much, Freddie.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/1/2017 5:18:00 PM

A great job at interpreting his theme, Lin. I notice the pattern of rhyme is not usual. I wonder if there is a special name for that kind of rhyme!

Lin Lane
Date: 9/1/2017 8:13:00 PM

It's just abba...cddc, etc Thank you.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 8/27/2017 8:37:00 PM

Wonderfully dark and masterfully-penned, Lin - best of luck in the contest - you get my vote!

Lin Lane
Date: 8/28/2017 9:50:00 PM

Thank you very much, Greg.

Tim Smith

Date: 8/27/2017 4:42:00 PM

Perfection is subjective when it comes to the human species. I tend to emphasize the heart and there you have more than most.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2017 7:08:00 PM

Your comments are touching my heart, Tim. Thank you very much.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/27/2017 4:26:00 PM

I love poems as this, dark and filled with introspection, and the image you chose, amazing, that might even inspire me! :)

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2017 7:07:00 PM

Your recent write inspired me, so it's only fair that you write something if you've been inspired by this depressing tale. Thank you, Art.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/27/2017 3:45:00 PM

such intense deep dark imagery Lin - I'm so glad i don't suffer from depression like this:-( hugs jan xxx

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2017 7:06:00 PM

I'm with you on this one, Jan. There's enough contention in the world to wreak havoc, so we don't need inner turmoil to rattle us. Thank you.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/27/2017 11:39:00 AM

- I'm overwhelmed by these deeply sad feelings, Lin ... a storm of feelings great described - GL in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2017 11:46:00 AM

How awful it must be to have such a low opinion of oneself. Thank you sincerely, Anne-Lise, and hugs back to you.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/27/2017 9:15:00 AM

This is sad and very deep writing on depression, Lin:) a winner for me:)

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2017 9:51:00 AM

Helloooo, Jo. Depression is such a sad emotion. Thank you for liking the journey this one has taken. ;-)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/27/2017 9:06:00 AM

So well written, Lin!

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2017 9:49:00 AM

Thank you for your kind thoughts, Vijay.