Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

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One Step Closer To the Edge

Beset by doubts before I rise from bed
Problems prey on my worrisome mind 
My ability to reason has been maligned
Cockamamie notions fill me with dread

I see in the mirror, a disgruntled reflection
the haggard expression on my vexed face
I wear a frown that's been plastered in place
Malaise of despair poisons me with infection

On the edge of a mountain, lost in thought
always hungry and thirsty for peace of mind
It's been illusive to me, or have I been blind
Wanting to do what's right, but falling short

My past hovers in stygian clouds overhead
I haven't always made the wisest decisions,
which worries me to the point of derision
My sanity is in question, so lightly I tread

Conscience wallowing, sinking in quicksand
I'm standing at the fork of two raging rivers 
My legs are trembling and my lip quivers
Crying for help; someone to take my hand

Would if I could, be a model of perfection
My psyche is shackled by chaotic unrest
Sagacity abandoned me; life is a mental test
I second guess myself with fear of rejection

I climbed back up to that mountain ledge 
engrossed by waves crashing beneath me
Contemplating an idea to set my mind free
I wearily move one step closer to the edge


8/27/2017

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Subimal Sinha-Roy September 4, 2017 at 11:15 PM Congratulations on your well deserved win, Lin, with a beautiful poem. Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:58 AM thank you

Dale Gregory Cozart September 4, 2017 at 11:46 AM Awesome, Line. Congrats on your win. Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:58 AM thank you

John Hamilton September 4, 2017 at 11:12 AM What can I say Lin, you are always in the winners circle(it seems to me) in my contests, another stellar write, congrats on another great win! Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:58 AM Thank you, John.

Freddie Robinson Jr. September 1, 2017 at 9:39 PM Brilliant poem, Lin. Simply brilliant. The underlying dark tone, the wistful desire for happiness ... the awareness of where one's mental state is at, near the breaking point. Masterfully written by a golden pen wordsmith. Your poetry shines! Love and joy always. Lin Lane September 2, 2017 at 7:10 AM Thanks so much, Freddie.

Andrea Dietrich September 1, 2017 at 5:18 PM A great job at interpreting his theme, Lin. I notice the pattern of rhyme is not usual. I wonder if there is a special name for that kind of rhyme! Lin Lane September 1, 2017 at 8:13 PM It's just abba...cddc, etc Thank you.

Gregory Richard Barden August 27, 2017 at 8:37 PM Wonderfully dark and masterfully-penned, Lin - best of luck in the contest - you get my vote! Lin Lane August 28, 2017 at 9:50 PM Thank you very much, Greg.

Tim Smith August 27, 2017 at 4:42 PM Perfection is subjective when it comes to the human species. I tend to emphasize the heart and there you have more than most. Lin Lane August 27, 2017 at 7:08 PM Your comments are touching my heart, Tim. Thank you very much.

Jan Allison August 27, 2017 at 3:45 PM such intense deep dark imagery Lin - I'm so glad i don't suffer from depression like this:-( hugs jan xxx Lin Lane August 27, 2017 at 7:06 PM I'm with you on this one, Jan. There's enough contention in the world to wreak havoc, so we don't need inner turmoil to rattle us. Thank you.

Anne-Lise Andresen August 27, 2017 at 11:39 AM - I'm overwhelmed by these deeply sad feelings, Lin ... a storm of feelings great described - GL in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Lin Lane August 27, 2017 at 11:46 AM How awful it must be to have such a low opinion of oneself. Thank you sincerely, Anne-Lise, and hugs back to you.

Joanna Daniel August 27, 2017 at 9:15 AM This is sad and very deep writing on depression, Lin:) a winner for me:) Lin Lane August 27, 2017 at 9:51 AM Helloooo, Jo. Depression is such a sad emotion. Thank you for liking the journey this one has taken. ;-)

Vijay Pandit August 27, 2017 at 9:06 AM So well written, Lin! Lin Lane August 27, 2017 at 9:49 AM Thank you for your kind thoughts, Vijay.