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No rooster crowed the tenebrous morning I woke to somber skies aflame. As dawn rose across a crimson horizon, a firestorm blazed from a golden core and scarlet lava flowed above the plains. Charred, were black mordant clouds. Menancingly, they swept over my barn. A rubicund threat; a hazard to the earth, an inferno; a warning of ill-fated death. Terror filled me as fire encroached, knowing I would become a torch, kindled when scorching embers approached to ignite me, rendering a fight for life futile. Laughter heard as I became ribbons of smoke. Soon, my ashes would be airborne, and all that would remain of me would be carried on the whim of the wayward wind.

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Date: 5/2/2023 3:47:00 PM
the final tercet....and the crescendo of the final line....Beautifully done,
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Date: 5/2/2023 3:55:00 PM
Thank you very much, John. Knowing your writing talent, that's high praise.
Date: 5/2/2023 3:46:00 PM
Nice write! I learned a new word (mordant). Just curious - why do people call me Flo? I'm still confused :)
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Date: 5/2/2023 3:53:00 PM
I don't know... a case of follow the leader? Your name, even with the initials is very similar to another poet on site. I'm sorry. Thanks for the kind comments though.
Date: 5/2/2023 6:46:00 AM
I really like this dark poem and I like the idea of being blown away at the whim of a wayward wind. Very nice penning, Lin.
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Date: 5/2/2023 6:49:00 AM
It's a titch out of the norm for me, but I would prefer my ashes to be carried on the wind over being interred in the ground. Thanks a lot, Danny.
Date: 5/2/2023 5:01:00 AM
A bit grim , but clearly the fate of many past souls with ashes carried away on the wind. Well written and thoughtful, but you’ve put me right off my bbq lunch.
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Date: 5/2/2023 5:09:00 AM
Aye, Peter. The sense of gloom and doom were overwhelming to me. Thanks for the great comments, and about your lunch? I'm sorry. ;-)
Date: 5/2/2023 5:00:00 AM
Love your interpretation of the painting Lin, I felt a sense of forboding reading this. Tom
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Date: 5/2/2023 5:08:00 AM
Thank you, Tom. The painting affected me in the same way. I looked at it for a moment and many of the thoughts in this write took root. I felt defeated when I realized there was no way to escape the inevitable ending.

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